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Q1
Overall a good answer. Some Specific observations:
1. The intro could’ve been better if the Ozone hole was defined
2. Missed 1-2 meteorological conditions like Polar Vortex (which isolates the air over Antarctica from the world)
3. No need for specifying too many harms w.r.t question
4. Conclusion is good
Hi Kunal
Good intro. Its short and to the point.
The coverage of the 1st and 2nd parts are adequate.
Language of the answer is good.
Good concluding paragraph.
Decent attempt.
Marks: 6
Q2
Just in a couple statement, mention whats the importance of data in the present times.
In the discussion regarding pros and cons of data localisation, points are decent but structure is weak and flow is not in the 1st part.
For better structure use sub headings and try to keep similar discussions together.
There is lack of coherence regarding whether data localisation is good or bad.
The way forward needs more depth and points. This cannot be dealt in a concluding paragraph.
Read the model answers.
Marks: 2.5
Q3
That’s a simple and to the point answer
I just felt that had u elaborated the concluding paragraph a bit more instead of just using it as a conclusion ,it would have been better
Else everything was good.
Very good discussion.
Marks: 6
Q4
Delightful intro.
Answer and discussion were good and to the point.
It was not preachy and points were effective.
To improve this answer, you should give examples like Coal Block Auction Case where the then coal secretary was imprisoned.
Marks: 6
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data locolozation
Hi Rohi
After intro, mention what is the importance of data in the current global regime.
Rest of the answer is fine and on the satisfactory line.
Read the model answer for way forward.
Marks: 5.5
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Hi Ashok
First half of the answer is attempted in decent manner.
But 2nd half needs more points and depth.
read the model answer.
Good language.
Marks: 4
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Q2
After your intro, discuss briefly, the importance of data in the present world.
Your 1st half of the answer is ok but you missed to answer the second part of the question: “provide a solution which works for all stakeholders involved.”
Read the model answer for this part.
Marks: 2.5
q1
Hi Utkarsh
Give some more insights in the 1st part of the answer.
Good use of diagram.
Good second part and conclusion of the answer.
Marks: 3
q2
Very good intro.
Good answer.
Overall, all the dimensions are covered and discussed in holistic manner.
Decent attempt.
5.5
q3
Very nice.
You mentioned very good points.
Good language.
Nothing to improve in this answer.
Marks: 6
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3rd answer
You started the answer really well.
But the second part needs better discussion.
Simply discuss the importance of the relationship between BRs and FRs and how BRs should be strengthened.
Better conclusion.
marks: 3.5
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Hi Sourav, please dont upload answers on third party, as mentioned in earlier tests also. And kindly submit answers for the relevant dates only. You have submitted answer of last week here. This breaks our flow.
Kindly avoid this practice.
Give more points regarding spreading of the zoonotic diseases. Read the model answer in this regard.
Points are quite general and you need to work on it.
Good way forward.
Marks: 2
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Hi Mohsin
Please avoid submitting answers on third party sites. It breaks our flow.
And please upload pics in portrait mode and not in landscape mode.
Very big paragraph and lengthy intro.
Points are general.
Read model answer.
Marks: 2
Sir please mention the shortcomings in detail
Thankyou
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Q1
Hi Pranab
Good answer but more elaboration is needed, specially in the 1st part.
Break the 1st part paragraphs into bullet points and try to explain a bit more.
rest of the answer is fine and coverage is decent.
Marks: 4.5
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Q2
After intro, mention what is the importance of data in the current global regime.
Rest of the answer is perfect and points are satisfying,
Good presentation and structure.
Marks: 6
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Q3
I found your answer very informative.
Good attempt.
Second part is covered in quite effective manner.
Marks: 6
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Hi Vishal
Very good 1st part of the answer.
Explanation is crisp and to the point.
Presentation (writing) needs work.
2nd part is quite weak and it is lackluster.
There is no depth or width in the coverage.
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Q2
After intro, mention what is the importance of data in the current global regime
Shrikrishan committee should be mentioned in the in present and proposed policy of the data localistaion also you can give the example of cloud committee in present policy
Rest of the answer is fine
Marks: 4.5
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Q3
Good attempt.
Answer is easy and yet informative.
Give little more insights in the 2nd part of the answer.
1st part is handed nicely.
Marks: 5
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Very well structured answer. The para following intro is long. WF is very good, especially ‘national cooling action plan’
Hi Varsha
Try to keep paragraphs smaller.
Apart from that, the answer is very good…explanations are much relevant …nice approach…well written…
Good conclusion as well…
Nice attempt…well done…keep it up…keep writing…
Marks: 6.5
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Hi Parth
Combine the 1st two paragraphs to make an unified intro.
You do not need to too technical in your explanation. Keep the discussion short and simple in technical questions.
Second part of the answer needs more points and depth.
Marks: 4
Q2
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Introduction seems to be okay…though more clarity would have been brought….
After intro, briefly mention why DATA IS THE NEW OIL???
Ideas mentioned are good….and well arranged…
Conclusion is good as well…
Overall, nice answer…good attempt…Keep it up…
Keep writing…
Marks: 5.5
Q3
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Good and precise introduction…
Overall, good attempt….
prioritizing ideas with articulation will make your answer very good…
keep practicing
Keep writing…
Marks: 4.5
Q4
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The answer is good with good conclusion…
Over a decent attempt…
Nice approach….
Points and explanation are good.
Marks: 4
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Pls Bear with the landscape mode one last time. Will be using camscanner from now on.
Quite a good answer.
Explanation is really delightful.
Structure and presentation are crisp and yet easy on the flow.
Overal nothing wrong in the answer.
Marks: 6
Q4 MOJO9611C00A14581096
Good examples
Discussion is to the point.
1st part of the answer is really well attempted and once again coverage has depth and width.
Decent attempt.
Marks: 6
Q2 MOJO9611C00A14581096
After intro, mention why data has become so important these days and why we hear terms like DATA IS THE NEW OIL.
Good discussion in the first part.
Pleasant use of flowchart. Its a good tool if used in right manner.
Way forwards are good.
Overall again good answer.
Marks: 6
Q2)
Please note that conclusion continues as follows: “strike a balance between promotion of efficiency and security. By doing so, India will fulfil the Prime Minister’s recent commitment to free economic flows and anti protectionism”
Hi Shashank
After intro, mention why data has become so important these days and why we hear terms like DATA IS THE NEW OIL.
Very lengthy answer.
Is mainly because of your presentation skills and not because of exceeding word limits.
Write in smaller handwriting. This way you will get more space and your coverage of the answer will be better.
Points in the pros and cons are general nature.
Read the model answer.
Second half of the answer is better and approach is better.
Marks: 3
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Hi Prakhar
Depth is needed in the answer, specially 1st part.
More elaboration is needed, specially in the 1st part.
Break the 1st part paragraphs into bullet points and try to explain a bit more.
Read the model answer in this regard.
2nd part is covered nicely.
Good conclusion
Marks: 2.5
Q2
After intro, mention what is the importance of data in the current global regime
Shrikrishan committee should be mentioned in the in present and proposed policy of the data localistaion also you can give the example of cloud committee in present policy
Rest of the answer is perfectly fine.
The language is decent and crisp.
Points are placed in right manner and there is no over explanation there.
Marks: 5.5
Q3
Answer started really well but lacked depth in the main body.
More discussion is required as in:
what is BR and
what is the intermingling relationship between BRs and FRs and
what should be done to strengthen them?
Good conclusion
Marks: 2.5
Q4
Good but lengthy intro.
Points are ok but try to give some examples within the framework of civil services.
Also give real life examples like decisions taken in the coal block auction issue or 2G spectrum allocation case.
Good conclusion
Marks: 4
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Q1
Hi Pranita
Very good 1st part of the answer.
Explanation is so pleasant to the flow of the answer and is crisp.
The dimensions are covered really well in this part.
The discussion in the second part is equally well described and explained.
Overall very good attempt.
Keep it up
Marks: 6.5
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Q3
Good and precise introduction…
Points under Basic Rights discussion needed are good…Good conclusion….
Avoid too much of underlining or highlighting….If all the points are important then why to underline them….??
Overall, good attempt….prioritizing ideas with articulation will make your answer very good…keep practicing…
Keep writing…
Marks: 5.5
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Q.1)
Weak first part.
Whats the use of diagram if no underlining explanation entails it?
The first part needs better elaboration and discussion and points.
Read the model answers.
Similarly you have just mentioned pints in the 2nd part without having any sort of discussion.
Not the way to approach answers.
Read model answers or read answers of Kunal Agarwal or Varsha in the above comments.
Marks: 1.5
Q.2)
After intro, mention what is the importance of data in the current global regime.
Use of flowchart has not solved any purpose because of general nature of points.
Read model answer.
Your thought process and direction of the flow of the answer is decent but you are not able to articulate those points in effective and better language. Answers lack explanations and coverage and therefore points seem to be too general in nature.
Keep writing. Answer improvement is a long process and it takes time
Marks: 1.5
Q.3)
Better answer.
Conclusion is very lengthy.
Overall points are framed and presented in better manner than the last 2 answers.
Structure is better.
Marks: 3.5
Q.4)
Avoid lengthy paragraphs Your second paragraphs covered 60 percent of the 1st page and 40 percent of the 2nd page!
Better examples are needed. Read the model answer.
Again you know the required direction of the answer but failed to put a decent effort in terms of points or language or presentation.
Read all the model answers.
marks: 1.5
And this is the last time we are checking answers in this manner. From next time onwards avoid google photos and all the answers under one file. It wont be checked.
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Hi Ganesh
Points are more in the direction of reason of Ozone hole and not in the direction of the question asked which is: Why ozone hole develops over Antarctica, and not over manufacturing centers where chlorofluorocarbons are released prodigiously.
Read the model answers.
Better presentation is needed when using bullet points. What is the segment saying? What is the direction of the discussion in the bullet points? Use a subheading to make this clear for the examiner.
Better 2nd part of the answer but points are general in nature.
read the model answer.
Marks: 2
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Direction of the discussion is good but points need better explanation.
language is decent but lack of depth make it look render-less. Work on your presentation skills as well, specially the hand writing. Its too big for the UPSC answers.
Read the model answer for better understanding of what i mean explanation and coverage of the points.
Marks: 2.5
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