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- This question needs careful reading in order to parse it.
- The question demands the factors which made it possible for it to sustain its culture from ancient times. Or, it asks what helped India sustain its culture. The word ‘unique’ is used because of the great ancient cultures of the world that failed to achieve the feat.
- In intro briefly describe how Indian culture is a continuation of its past culture without a break.
- In the first part of the body briefly explain the factors like-celebrating individuality and differences of opinion, harmony, tolerance, liberalism, assimilation of different cultures with ease- which played a role in the continuation of the culture.
- In the second part briefly discuss how in recent times Indian society has seen the emergence of divisive tendencies on the lines of caste, religion, language, region etc. which stands in sharp contrast with the glorious past.
- Conclude by stressing the importance of those factors even in the present to help India maintain its cultural identity.
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Though you tried to discuss a couple of unique features of the Indian culture, but you failed to discuss how they are responsible to sustain its unique identity.
You have to link your flowchart with the subsequent discussion.
The 2nd part of the answer is missing.
Your simple task was this:
In the first part of the body briefly explain the factors like-celebrating individuality and differences of opinion, harmony, tolerance, liberalism, assimilation of different cultures with ease- which played a role in the continuation of the culture.
The second part should briefly discuss how in recent times Indian society has seen the emergence of divisive tendencies on the lines of caste, religion, language, region, etc.
The discussion could have been aligned in a better manner.
The direction is OK.
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Try to underline your imp points more prominently. It should not be scarce.
The 1st part of the answer is decent.
The overall coverage of the answer is very good.
Decent language and explanation.
The presentation is very good.
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What is the point of discussing the issue of resistance to conversion? You have to elaborate it further to make your point clear.
The first part of the answer started well but its later discussion and bullet points are vague and better content was needed there.
celebrating individuality & differences of opinion, harmony, tolerance, liberalism, assimilation of different cultures with ease, relative freedom to chose his/her own belief, etc are the talking points in the first part that should be explored
The 2nd part of the answer is handled well.
It has good elements.
The structure is perfect
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A very good answer.
You have covered all the elements nicely.
The balance is perfect and the main focus is given to the demand of the question.
The points are well divided into various segments.
Points are apt and well explained.
All in all a near perfect attempt