Mentor’s comment-
- https://indianexpress.com/
article/opinion/columns/the- indian-ocean-front-6493234/ - In the intro, highlight the region’s importance from security, economic, historical, cultural point of view.
- In the body, elaborate the Indo-Pacific vision by highlighting ASEAN centrality, inclusivity, commitment to shared prosperity etc. Factors that explain China’s reluctance could be its “Malacca Dilemma” and the BRI project, suspicion of the India-U.S. cooperation against it.
- Conclude by stressing the need to recognise the Chinese approach to the region and acting on it through persisting with the vision of Indo-Pacific.
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Hi Taran
Rephrase your introduction.
First write about the significance of the Indo-Pacific Region,you can write that it is a rich region in terms of natural resources,trillion dollars trade flows through South China sea etc.
Then write briefly about the India’s perspective of Indo-Pacific region.
Go through the mentor’s comment before writing,it will help you in planning the stricture of the answer.
Write some way forward like the countries in the region should have equal access as a right under international law to the use of common spaces on sea and in the air .
Then conclude.
Work on basic grammar,spellings and handwriting.
Underline keywords.
Work hard,you will improve.
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Hi Deepika
Before writing the significance of the Indo-Pacific region, in the introduction explain briefly what do you mean by Indo-Pacific vision.
Your content is well diversified.
Use some map diagrams for better presentation.
Add more points like strong naval capabilities, multilateral diplomacy, economic integration with nations is necessary for India to meet the challenges within the Indo-Pacific region.
Structure of answer is good.
Work on spellings.
You have the potential of writing good answers, keep writing,you will succeed !
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Hi Shubham
Good introduction.
Explain the Indo-Pacific Vision and significance of it briefly.
You can draw some map diagrams to present your answers in a better way.
Improve your writing language, for example write that for India, Indo-Pacific stands for a free, open, inclusive region. It includes all nations in the geography and also others who have a stake in it.
Write some way forward . Explain that the strong naval capabilities, multilateral diplomacy, economic integration with nations in the region is necessary for India
Your conclusion is like introduction, differentiate between the two.
Brainstorm before writing.
Work on content.
Do not get demotivated by the marks,keep writing,you will improve.
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Hi Amandeep
First thing,try to write little small as space will be limited in the mains answer sheet.
Lackluster intoduction,highlight the region’s importance from security, economic, historical, cultural point of view.
India’s vision is not centered around UNCLOS,write the statements carefully.
Read mentor’s comment and the article link before writing, it will help you in improving content and structure of the answer.
Mention Malacca dilemma, BRI etc.
Read comprehensively to enrich your content.
Improve handwriting and basic grammar.
It is appreciable that you are trying to write the answers, keep writing,you will improve.
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Hi Dakshina
Content is good in the introduction but grammatical errors are there.
Before writing China’s concern,explain the Indo-Pacific vision by highlighting ASEAN centrality, inclusivity, commitment to shared prosperity etc.
Use of map diagrams is appreciable.
You have deviated from the demand of the question,read mentor’s comment before writing.
Try to manage your space,if your are making a flow chart then do not explain each point of the flow chart individually.
Write some way forward and conclusion.
Mention SAGAR initiative and necessity of Maritime Domain Awareness (MDA) and multipolarity in the region.
Work on content and structure.
Keep writing !
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Hi NJ
Good introduction.
Content is good in the first part, write about RCEP also.
Also explain briefly the significance of the Indo-Pacific region.
You can draw some relevant map diagrams to get better marks.
You have mentioned the factors of China’s reluctance in a decent manner,you can also mention that the Chinese regime claims that it has historical ownership over nearly the entire region so issues are there.
In way forward, mention the necessity of Maritime Domain Awareness (MDA) and multipolarity in the region.
Always end your answer with some concluding remarks.
Try to manage your space.
Overall a good attempt.
Keep writing.
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Hi Chester
Lackluster introduction, highlight the region’s importance from security, economic, historical, cultural point of view.
Use of map diagram is appreciable but try to make your map little more specific.
You have explained India’s vision in a decent manner.
After writing the China’s reluctance , write some way forward . Explain that the strong naval capabilities, multilateral diplomacy, economic integration with nations in the region is necessary for India .
Good conclusion.
Work on grammar, avoid using unnecessary capital alphabets in between of a sentence.
Improve your handwriting.
Keep writing !
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Hi Unnati
Good introduction.
Use of flow chart is appreciable but try to make it little neat.
You have explained the India’s vision and Chinese reluctance in a decent manner.
Always try to write some way forward . Explain that the strong naval capabilities, multilateral diplomacy, economic integration with nations in the region is necessary for India .
Good conclusion.
Work on your handwriting, make your ‘s’ properly.
You can also make a map diagram to present your answer in a better form.
Overall a decent attempt.
Keep writing.