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- In the introduction, write the facts pointed by the report- Women, Business and the Law (WBL) report.
- In the body first discuss why a country should focus on gender equality. Comment on the aspects brought out by the report, such as the index analyzes laws and regulations affecting women’s economic inclusion in 190 economies. Explain the importance of factors such as mobility, workplace, pay, marriage, parenthood,
entrepreneurship, assets, and pension and their essence to women. Discuss the performance of India with examples if possible. - Conclude with way forward.
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Hi Taran
In the introduction, along with the WBL report, define gender equality.
Factors highlighted in the reports are well explained.
But the answer is incomplete, explain why a country must focus on Gender Equality, you can write Gender equality is a fundamental and inviolable human right and women’s and girls’
empowerment is essential to expand economic growth, promote social development.
Enrich your content, cover different aspects, you can write SDGs, reproductive health, women and science etc.
Work on content, read comprehensively to enrich it.
Improve your handwriting and avoid grammatical mistakes.
Good conclusion.
Keep writing, you will improve.
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Hi PS
In the introduction, along with the WBL report, define gender equality.
You have explained the why India should focus on gender equality in a good manner.
Use of flow chart is appreciable.
Work on space management, need to summarise your content.
Highlights of the reports are well written.
Write about reproductive health also.
The content is good and well placed.
Conclusion is missing, conclude that gender shouldn’t be an unreasonable determining factor curbing the potential of women.
Overall a decent attempt.
Keep working hard !