Mentor’s comment-
- In the introduction explain in brief the issue of public safety associated with women.
- In the body discuss first in what way in spite of various claims being made and voices being raised, the situation of women in India remains precarious with respect to public safety. Explain the notions of “safety” and “freedom” of women in India, what are the associated flaws. Discuss the role of state, stakeholders involved in assuring women public safety.
- Conclude with way forward as to what needs to be done to ensure women safety in public.
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Hi Arun
Good introduction, but write complete sentence, rate of crime against women.
After writing the introduction, write the challenges that women face with respect to public safety, do not write just bullet points, substantiate each of them one or two lines.
You can also add the data of Thomson Reuters Foundation.
Way forward is decently discussed but try to make the flow chart little neat.
Work on handwriting.
Content wise good attempt, work on presentation.
Keep working hard !
POINTS ARE GOOD JUST NEED TO WORK ON YOUR HANDWRITING, AS IT’LL END UP BY GULPING UP SOME OF YOUR GOOD POINTS
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TO THE POINT NICE ATTEMPT,
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Hi Samiksha
The question is asking about the challenges that women face with respect to public safety, so write about that only, do not write the women issues in general.
Content is good, add some reports also like Thomson Reuters Foundation.
Conclusion is missing.
In the way forward, you ca write points like G-Auto model of Ahmedabad.
Diversify your content.
Keep working hard !
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Hi Divya
First thing, this is a 10 marker question, so try to complete your answer in maximum two pages, adhere to word limit.
Good introduction but it should be in one small paragraph, summarise your introduction.
The question is asking about the challenges that women face with respect to public safety, so write about that only, do not write the women issues in general.
Suggested strategy is decently explained but try to adhere to the demand of the question.
Conclusion is missing, always end your answer with some concluding remarks.
Overall a good attempt.
Keep writing, you will improve.
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Hi Somasis
Good introduction.
The question is asking about the challenges that women face with respect to public safety, so write about that only, do not write the women issues in general.
You can write that insecure transportation not only leads to violence against and violation of basic rights of women, but also adversely affects their ability to participate in the labor market. Therefore, it is imperative that measures must be taken for making transportation secure and safe.
In the suggested strategy , quote some examples like G-Auto model of Ahmedabad, pink rikshaw initiative etc.
Conclusion is missing, always end your answer with some concluding remarks.
Overall a good attempt.
Keep writing, you will improve.
Thankyou. Will surely work on it
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Hi Kaushal
Good introduction.
The question is asking about the challenges that women face with respect to public safety, so write about that only, do not write the women issues in general.
You can write that insecure transportation not only leads to violence against and violation of basic rights of women, but also adversely affects their ability to participate in the labor market. Therefore, it is imperative that measures must be taken for making transportation secure and safe.
Use headings and subheadings to present your answer in a better structured manner.
Work on handwriting and underline more often.
Good conclusion.
Persistence is the key to success, keep writing, you will succeed.
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