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- In the introduction discuss the concept of Sea level rise.
- In the body you can write that SLR is an increase in the level of the world’s oceans due to the effects of climate change, especially
global warming, induced by three primary factors – Thermal Expansion, melting glaciers, Loss of Greenland and Antarctica’s ice sheets. Quote some key data such as – Global sea level has been rising over the past century, and the rate has accelerated in recent decades. The average global sea level has risen 8.9 inches between 1880 and 2015. That’s much faster than in the previous 2,700 years.
Discuss the possible consequences and with suitable facts explain in what way it is more a consequence of climate change. - Conclude with solutions to address the issue, explain what needs to be done; significance of global collective efforts in this direction.
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Hi Divya
Good introduction.
Use of diagram is appreciable.
Write some factors that aggravate sea-level rise, you can mention anthropogenic activities, burning of fossil fuels, deforestation etc.
Consequences and way forward are discussed in a comprehensive manner, keep it up.
In the way forward, you can also mention some initiatives like-
-The International Cryosphere Climate Initiative
Overall a decent attempt.
Keep it up !
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Hi Somasis
In the introduction , you have defined the climate change, instead of this discuss the concept of Sea level rise.
Reasons are discussed in a good manner.
After the reasons, briefly write about the consequences then write the way forward.
Need to add more points in the way forward, you can write about Paris agreement 2016, the International Cryosphere Climate Initiative , pricing carbon, i.e., making major polluters pay for their emissions. This provides an incentive for major emitters to reduce their output and phasing out coal power plants.
Some good points but work on content.
Underline keywords.
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Hi Arun
Work on introductory remarks, define sea level rise. You can write that Sea level rise is one of the most severe impacts of climate change, with rising waters threatening to inundate small-island nations and coastal regions by the end of the century.
Before writing the consequences , cite some reasons . You can mention anthropogenic activities, burning of fossil fuels, deforestation etc.
Follow a proper structure to get better marks.
You have written consequences in a good manner, but there is no suggested strategy in your answer. Need to write the way forward, you can write about Paris agreement 2016, the International Cryosphere Climate Initiative , pricing carbon, i.e., making major polluters pay for their emissions. This provides an incentive for major emitters to reduce their output and phasing out coal power plants.
Work on content, read comprehensively to enrich it.
Work hard, you will improve.
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Hi Vinay
Good introduction.
Instead of writing the data about sea level rise, substantiate the reasons of sea level rise.
Consequences are written in a good manner.
Need to add more points in the way forward, you can write about pricing carbon, i.e., making major polluters pay for their emissions. This provides an incentive for major emitters to reduce their output and phasing out coal power plants. Also mention initiatives like the International Cryosphere Climate Initiative .
Keep writing !
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