Mentor’s comment-
- In the introduction, briefly explain gender equality.
- In the body, explain in detail the social constraints leading to gender inequality. Then write the measured needed .
- Conclude with reasserting the importance of gender equality.
No. 1 UPSC IAS Platform for preparation
Mentor’s comment-
tiwarisamiksha6@gmail.com
Hi Samiksha
Good introduction.
In the issues , need to add more diverse points like-
-Judicial remedies or police reforms, though absolutely necessary, are mostly curative, rather
than being preventive.
-Benefits like maternity leave or related facilities will not be accessible to her in the informal
sector.
Measures are discussed in a decent manner.
Good conclusion, you can also mention SDG 5.
Try to cover various aspects to get better marks.
Keep writing, you will improve.
krushnapatilpk@gmail.com
Hi Krushna
Good introduction, also define gender equality very briefly.
Issues are discussed in a comprehensive manner, but you need to work on space management as you have only written the issues, suggest measures also.
In the measures, you can write –
-Need to create avenues and opportunity with conscious effort for empowering women rather
than giving freebies.
-Gender Neutral laws.
-Favouring women gives rise to inequality in society so even men should be given avenues.
Good conclusion.
Try to answer the complete question.
Write all four questions on a regular basis to improve your writing skills.
Keep writing, you will improve.
divyaloyola13@gmail.com
Hi Divya
Scan your sheet properly.
Good introduction, you can also quote the data of the UNDP’s Gender Social Norms Index.
You have discussed the challenges in a decent manner.
Suggested strategy is also good.
Thumbs up for the structure.
Content is to the point, well written answer.
Persistence is the key to success, keep writing, you will succeed.