Mentor’s Comments-
- Introduce by giving a brief background on the caste system in India.
- Highlight the social and economic discrimination caused due to caste system.
- Mention a brief way forward.
- Conclude appropriately.
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Mentor’s Comments-
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Arpita
Nice attempt. You can mention briefly define the caste system in introduction–decided by birth, hereditary etc.
Points regarding social exclusion are fine. In economic exclusion part, you can mention some government report or data for value addition. Also you can link inequality to lower literacy and then to economic discrimination.
Also mention a short way forward.
Keep writing. 🙂
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Ashok,
Decent attempt. Introduction is fine, you can mention that it is birth-based and hereditary.
Social exclusion part is also fine, in economic discrimination, try to mention some government report or data for value-addition.
You can link discrimination to literacy and then to economic discrimination. Also mention a bit about wage discrimination, hiring issues etc
Way forward is fine. Write a conclusion even if 1 line.
Keep writing. 🙂
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Muskan
In introduction, instead of mentioning British period etc, you can define what is caste system. That will be simple and better.
Social exclusion part is okay, mention impact on literacy, health etc. Also mention the notion of purity and pollution prevalent in the society.
Mid-day meal, violence etc can also be mentioned in social part only.
In economic, other than reservation issues, mention about issues in hiring, wage discrimination, difficulty in changing occupations, forced to do menial jobs etc. Some government data regarding these things will be good.
Write a way forward(2-3 points) and keep the conclusion short.
Keep writing. 🙂
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Priyanka,
Nice attempt.
In the introduction, instead of focusing on Inequality, mention about caste and its origin and basis.
Social exclusion part is good but in economic exclusion mention about illiteracy and health issues and how it reinforces economic exclusion. Support your argument with relevant government data. In the conclusion do not simply mention article number but also briefly describe what those articles talk about. Overall good attempt. Keep writing.
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Saran,
Good attempt.
Introduction should be moderate. Do not start with a negative tone such as caste as a system of discrimination and exclusion. Rather define caste system its origin and basis in the introduction. In the social exclusion part, mention some more points like literacy, health, gender related discrimination. Economic exclusion part is fine but support your arguments with relevant data from government sources. Write 2-3 points in conclusion as way forward.
Keep practicing.
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Siddharth,
Very good attempt.
Introduction is good and you can mention that from occupation based it turned into birth-based and hereditary.
Social exclusion part is also fine, in economic discrimination, try to mention some government report or data to support your arguments.
You can link discrimination to literacy and then to economic discrimination. Also mention a bit about wage discrimination, hiring issues, health and gender related exclusion.
In the conclusion do not simply mention article number but also briefly describe what those articles talk about.
Keep writing.