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- Give a brief introduction on urbanisation in India.
- Mention the social and cultural structures of inequality and exclusion in the urban areas.
- Mention how they are creating fault lines for future conflicts.
- Conclude accordingly.
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Kajal
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Try to write the answer in blank sheets rather than ruled ones, it will be helpful in stimulating exam conditions.
Introduction is fine, further you can add some data about rapid urbanization (590mn people in urban areas by 2030).
Next part where you have talked about class, caste differences in cities is fine. You can elaborate upon these points.. Such as caste-based occupation still there, marital preference in same caste etc. Next, issues such as gender equality, migrants vs locals(son of soil concept) can be mentioned. Question is not about environmental problems so you can avoid that part about other effects of urban sprawl. Focus should be on social and cultural inequality.
Next, mention a section on what are the fault lines being created for future conflicts- anti-immigrant sentiment, increase in criminal activities, communal tension and related violence etc
In conclusion, you can talk about making urbanization more inclusive.
Keep practicing. 🙂
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Introduction is fine but overall the content is less for a 15 market.
You have mentioned some of the standalone problems of cities, that’s fine, but try to mention some inequalities that we traditionally associate with villages also being seen in cities now.
In rural areas inequality was based on caste, class, gender, insider-outsider feeling.. So you need to mention how there are differences in cities too based on these parameters.. Issue of class (poverty, poor living conditions) has been well explained, other points should also be incorporated. Such as caste-based occupation still there, marital preference in same caste etc, women involved mostly in domestic work, migrants vs locals(son of soil concept) can be talked about.
In fault lines, you can add points like anti-immigrant sentiment, increase in criminal activities, communal tension and related violence etc
Other points are fine.
Conclusion is decent.
Keep practicing. 🙂
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Sri
Introduction is good.
Rest of the answer has been elaborated on class differences. Try to diversify the answer. You need to show how Indian cities are mimicking the social and cultural structures of inequality and exclusion found in rural areas… In rural areas inequality was based on caste, class, gender, insider-outsider feeling.. So you need to mention how there are differences in cities too based on these parameters.. Issue of class (poverty, poor living conditions) has been well explained, other points should also be incorporated. Such as caste-based occupation still there, marital preference in same caste etc, women involved mostly in domestic work, migrants vs locals(son of soil concept) can be talked about.
Next, mention a section on what are the fault lines being created for future conflicts- anti-immigrant sentiment, increase in criminal activities, communal tension and related violence etc
Concluding paragraph is decent.
Keep practicing. Try to write 2.5-3 pages for a 15 marker. 🙂