Mentor’s comment:
- ISRO recently proposed the IDRSS and stressed that it will have many benefits in terms of communication with India’s satellites and the space missions like Gaganyan.
- In the intro part briefly describe India’s plans to launch a manned space mission and need for real-time communication in such critical missions.
- In the main body of the answer describe the following-
- First, describe what Data Relay Satellite System is.
- Describe what Data Relay Satellite Systems do. What are its advantages over using ground stations in tracking satellites and space missions?
- Also, describe the specific details of the system like- how many satellites will be in it and in which orbit they would be placed.
- Then discuss its intended benefits
- In conclusion, describe how the progress made by India in space technology including the IDRSS will be beneficial for it.
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There is no link of IDRSS and the intro. The discussion on the moon mission suddenly shifts to the IDRSS. That is not the right approach. Even your mentor comments in the question says: “In the intro part briefly describe India’s plans to launch a manned space mission and need for real-time communication in such critical missions.”
Hence there should be a link to the main topic of the discussion in your intro.
There is virtually no subheading n the answer and there are just small paragraphs one after another.
The presentation is monotonous hence.
Underline key points always and try to write in the bullet points under relevant subheadings.
Good content in the main body.
Structuring is quite decent
But poor presentation makes the answer looks as if we are reading an editorial. AVoid this.
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Your answer has answered the core demand of the question without missing a step and it has the quality content.
The content is crisp, to the point, and effective.
The structure is very good.
Good use of the flowchart in the 1st part of the answer.
All in all, a very good attempt
But underline important points in your answer and give some space between points
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Very good use of the diagram.
Keep it up.
Very good intro.
The answer has the perfect balance.
The content in the main body is well placed.
Good that you discussed in-depth points of IDRSS.
The last part of the answer is well handled.
The language and explanation are perfect.
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Try to avoid framing lengthy statements. That affects the essence of points. Also, it makes the points over-explained.
You have virtually discussed the IDRSS twice in the answer. Avoid the duplication of the points.
Good use of the diagram.
The overall direction of the answer is very good.
The presentation is clear but avoid too much cutting in your statements. That shows the hurry or the indecisiveness in your thought process.