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- In the introduction briefly define what you understand by Buddhism.
- In the body explain that Buddhism is a pragmatic teaching which starts from certain fundamental propositions about how we experience the world and how we act in it. It teaches that it is possible to transcend this sorrow-laden world of our experience and is concerned first and last with ways of achieving that
transcendence. By “social action” it means that there are many different kinds of action intended to benefit mankind. These range from simple individual acts of charity, teaching and training, organized kinds of service, “Right Livelihood” in and outside the helping professions, and through various kinds of community development as well as to political activity in working for a better society. - Conclude with significance of Buddhism in throwing away the dominant Brahminical culture.
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Hi Divya
Good introduction.
In the body of the answer, you have written only about the teachings of Buddhism, cover other aspects also .
For example, first write about the reasons for rise of Buddhism, then write about its impact on Indian society, club the teachings in it.
Good conclusion but need to summarise it.
Try to cover different aspects of the given topic to fetch better marks.
Underline keywords.
Keep working hard.
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Hi Anarkaly
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Good introduction.
Refrain from monotony, use proper headings and subheadings to present your answer in a better structured manner..
Also refrain from such long paragraphs, write in points or a mix of points and small paragraphs.
Give headings like rise of Buddhism, then write about its impact on Indian society, club the teachings in it.
Work on presentation, underline keywords.
Good conclusion.
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