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- https://indianexpress.com/article/opinion/columns/indian-economy-gdp-growth-agriculture-crisis-grain-management-farmers-6201226/
- “What are the reformative steps taken by the Government to make food grain distribution system more effective” (UPSC 2019).
- The article mainly deals with the issues related to the efficiency of grain management and its implications for the Central govt. and it further suggests the improvements that could be made to the system.
- The question wants us to explain why there are still inefficiencies in the management system and their implications and ways to increase efficiency.
- In the intro, write the objectives and background of the National Food Security Act (NFSA).
- In the main body, explain the area where there is scope for improvement and support the answer with facts and figures.
- End the answer by suggesting the implementations of the suggestions you cited for the increasing inefficiency.
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A very good intro.
The overall discussion is very good.
You kept the demand of the question at the centre stage and never veered away.
The balance between both parts of the main body is perfect.
You broke the question into small parts and answered each part holistically.
Very good way forward for the question.
The only scope of improvement is you have to write a small conclusion in the answer summarizing all your points and presenting an optimistic future.
The language and expressions in the answer are very good.
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When there are only a couple of points to discuss, then do not use flowchart. Flowchart are effective when they have 5 6 points and you want to save space. The area covered in the flowchart right now is more than what a normal subheading and subsequent points in bullet formats would have taken.
Before discussing the issues with the grain management system under the National Food Security Act(NFSA), you have to discuss the reformative steps that Government has taken. That is clearly mentioned in the starting of the question that “Despite the reformative steps taken by the Government, there is still a large scope for improving….” So what are those reformative steps? That should be your 1st part of the main body.
Therefore, read the questions carefully and break it into small pieces and you will have your subheading required in the answer.
Again points discussed in the flowchart of the way forward are not many to create a flowchart. Hence avoid flowchart when points are less. Also, the way forward in this answer needs more point because that is the main demand of the question.
Good conclusion.
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Good intro.
But the 1st part of the answer is missing.
Before discussing the issues with the grain management system under the National Food Security Act(NFSA), you have to discuss the reformative steps that the Government has taken. That is clearly mentioned in the starting of the question that “Despite the reformative steps taken by the Government, there is still a large scope for improving….” So what are those reformative steps? That should be your 1st part of the main body.
The rest of the answer is very good in terms of the depth of the content.
Good that you mentioned Shanta Kumar committee in your way forward along with its recommendations.
The rest of the way forward is also good.
Good conclusion.
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Keep your subheadings separate from the content of the answer. It should be written separately as well as highlighted properly.
Apart from this issue, a very good answer Unnati.
The overall content is very good.
Your structure is the best part of the answer.
It is good that you divided the question into small parts and answered each of them.
The solutions are superb.
The last part is not called way forward. It is a conclusion actually.
Way forward means the steps or solutions needed further, which you discussed in the part prior to it.
Nice presentation and language in the answer.
Keep writing
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The structure needs to be better.
Before discussing the issues with the grain management system under the National Food Security Act(NFSA), you have to discuss the reformative steps that the Government has taken. So shift the 2nd part of the answer in your 1st and keeping those points in mind, discuss the issues with the grain management under NFSA in your 2nd part.
Right now your discussion on the issues with the NFSA as well as the reformative steps taken by the Govt is looming on general points but you have to specifically discuss the issues in grain management under NFSA and subsequent steps taken by the govt in that direction. Rest issues with the NFSA need not be mention here.
Similarly, the point of diversifying crops in your way forward is not related to grain management.
Remember the question is specifically asking about large scope of improvement in the grain management under NFSA and hence your talking points should revolve around it.
Read the question carefully.
Do write the concluding remark. That is your soft landing of the answer.
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