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- The question is straight forward. It asks to discuss the correlation between women empowerment and population growth.
- In the intro, highlight the high TFR and growth rate in India and the need to control it.
- In the body, discuss how women empowerment could help in the control of population growth rate-it promotes women’s agency, informed decision making, independent thinking and resisting the family pressure to have more babies, increase in awareness-all these factors help her decide on giving birth to a baby. In the next part cite the statistics from different states of India about female literacy rate and TFR of that state.
- Conclude by elaborating on the importance of population control and women empowerment.
Please review the answer.
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Never start an answer with a subheading.
Try to give subheadings that are relevant. Subheadings like Wonder Women are not suitable for the UPSC answers.
Also, link the demand of the question in your intro. You have to mention the importance of women in controlling the population briefly in the intro.
The answer is quite fragmented and not structured properly.
In the body, discuss how women empowerment could help in the control of population growth rate-it promotes women’s agency, informed decision making, independent thinking and resisting the family pressure to have more babies, increase in awareness-all these factors help her decide on giving birth to a baby. In the next part cite the statistics from different states of India about female literacy rate and TFR of that state.
Conclude by elaborating on the importance of population control and women empowerment.
You have to give a proper structure in the answer rin order to make it relevant.
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In the intro, highlight the high TFR and growth rate in India and the need to control it.
The way forwards are decent.
Good content in the main body of the answer.
Do write smaller bullet points. They should be seen as a small paragraph.
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You have discussed
1. Challenges in letting women take the control in their hands.
2. Measures needed to avoid these challenges.
But you failed to discuss the very demand of the question: “how women empowerment could help in the control of population growth rate”
What are those elements which are associated with better population management if women are empowered for taking decisions.
This is the 1st part of the main body.
Always read the question carefully and try to understand the demands of the question clearly.
review please
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Link the demand of the question in your intro. You have to mention the importance of women in controlling the population briefly in the intro. That is the demand of the question.
Right from the intro to your conclusion, you have attempted the answer in a decent manner.
The overall content is rich and has proper depth.
The coverage and dimensions in the content are also fine.
The structure is fine.
But underline imp stuff.
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Rather than discussing the steps taken by the government, you should discuss what more should be done in order to make women empowered to take control of the population control measure.
The rest of the answer is well attempted.
The content is exhaustive and well explained.
Good examples.
The structure of the main body is fine.
plz review
The overall approach is decent.
Your coverage is decent enough for the topic. You have covered almost all the dimensions.
Very good content in the conclusion.
The presentation should be made clear. Work on it.
sir is it necesaary to write conclusion after wayforward…plzz answer me
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