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Recently, the Kerala High Court upheld the right to have access to the internet as a part of the fundamental right to education along with the right to privacy under Article 21 of the Indian Constitution.
Benefits-
- India’s digital economy will touch $1 trillion by the year 2022. India would be a $10 trillion economy by 2030 and half of it would be the digital economy.
- Fintech sector—the Fintech sector in the recent couple of years has seen a huge jump in growth. Digital currency and online payment platforms have played a major role in financial inclusion.
- Public Services Sector—steady and efficient digital transformation across areas like e-governance and this has also considerably brought down leakages and corruption. In recent years India performed well in the transparency index.
- The health care sector is catching up to meet the demands of its tech-savvy population. Demand is shifting now to quality and affordable healthcare, much of it being fulfilled by a public-private partnership.
- Digital healthcare startups are playing a major role in addressing areas like preventive healthcare, analytics, emergency services and engage with super-aggregation platforms like Facebook and Google.
- Enterprise and Deep Technology sector—startups in this sector have made their presence felt globally with their success. The IT services in the country are set to reach USD 13.2 billion by the end of this year.
- E-commerce and Consumer internet sector—India’s e-commerce market is set to grow three times to surpass USD 100 billion by 2022.
- Travel and Hospitality sector—this sector has enjoyed rapid online growth since the beginning of this century. The growth is also attributed to the increase in disposable income, especially, among the millennials, who are changing decades of traditional travel trends.
Challenges
- Slow roll-out of Wi-Fi hotspots and the slow speed, in comparison to other developed nations.
- Most small and medium scale industry is struggling to adapt to modern technology.
- Entry-level smartphones have limited capabilities for smooth internet access, and the outreach of the ‘smartphones’ is limited.
- There is an absence of enough skilled manpower in digital technology.
- Lack of user education and there are limited facilities to train personnel. India needs over one million cybersecurity experts to check and monitor the growing menace of digital crime.
A digitally connected India can help in improving the social and economic condition of people through the development of non-agricultural economic activities apart from providing access to education, health, and financial services. However, it is important to note that ICT alone cannot directly lead to the overall development of the nation. The overall growth and development can be realized through supporting and enhancing elements such as literacy, basic infrastructure, overall business environment, regulatory environment, etc.
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Weak structure.
This is not how you should answers.
Avoid newspaper styles opinion-based answers.
You have to first introduce the topic in the intro and link it with the current events. For eg: “Recently, the Kerala High Court upheld the right to have access to the internet as a part of the fundamental right to education along with the right to privacy under Article 21 of the Indian Constitution.”
Then discuss the pros of having this right to the citizens.
What are the benefits of having unfettered access to the Internet?
Then in the second subheading, discuss the challenges with having the Right of the Internet.
Discuss points in terms of implementations and infrastructure as well.
Do mention the reports that mention as India having one of the ost internet blackouts in the World.
Then give the balanced way forward. What should be the ideal scenario in India?
All these points under various subheadings will be discussed through bullet points.
Your points are quite vague and general in nature.
Read the model answer.
Avoid commentary based answer writing. Back up your answer with to the point content.
Avoid too much cutting
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Decent structure of the answer.
You have covered all the relevant discussions through decent subheadings.
The points discussed in the main body are good.
It is good that you discussed the steps taken by the government. That gives balance to your answer.
Good way forwards.
Avoid too much cutting in your answers. That affects the presentation.
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Very good intro.
The background discussed is short and crisp and detailed.
The 1st part of the answer is dealt with nicely.
Various sub-parts of the 1st part are relevant and exhaustive.
The structure is weak though because you did not discuss the issues.
Do discuss the challenges or issues that will come in the way of the Internet as a fundamental right.
Discuss points in terms of implementations and infrastructure as well.
Do mention the reports that mention as India having one of the ost internet blackouts in the World.
Very good way forwards.
The presentation and writing are very good.
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The answer is perfect in terms of presentation and structure.
But way forwards are missing.
Very good intro.
The 1st part is correctly divided into two parts under the subparts of RTE and RTP.
The balance is perfect in the 2nd part of the answer.
Good presentation and clear writing.
Points are short and crisp.
It’s good that you discussed the steps taken by the government.
Do give proper way forward.
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The discussion on the Kerala HC decision should be done in the intro part.
The 1st part of the main body should only discuss the benefits of the internet and digital connectivity. Your 1st part lacks content in that direction.
The structure is weak because you discussed the benefits of internet access in the last part of the answer, that too with a simple flowchart.
Good 2nd part of the answer.
Decent coverage in this part.
It’s good that you discussed the steps taken by the government.
Decent way forwards.
Good content all in all but do make that your structure has the perfect coherency and content is placed in the right manner.
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The structure is decent but poor presentation.
The talking points in the body of the answer is decent.
Good coverage.
But the clarity of the structure and content is missing.
Also, you failed to discuss the way forward in the end.
Work on your writing.
Underline important parts and highlight your subheadings prominently.
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The answer lacks content and a proper structure.
Decent intro but the 1st and 2nd parts of the main body lack decent content along with proper subheadings.
Discuss the pros of having this right to the citizens.
What are the benefits of having unfettered access to the Internet?
Points should be exhaustive in this part.
Then in the second subheading, discuss the challenges with having the Right of the Internet.
Discuss points in terms of implementations and infrastructure as well.
Do mention the reports that mention as India having one of the ost internet blackouts in the World.
Then give the balanced way forward. What should be the ideal scenario in India?
Your points are quite vague and general in nature.
Read the model answer.
Avoid this kind of commentary-based answer writing. Back up your answer with to the point content.
Good language
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Very good intro.
The 1st part of the answer is dealt with nicely.
The structure is weak though because you did not discuss the issues with the Right to Internet.
Do discuss the challenges or issues that will come in the way of the Internet as a fundamental right.
Discuss points in terms of implementations and infrastructure as well.
Way forwards are vague.
The presentation and writing needs to be clear.
Avoid too much cutting
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Very good intro.
But way forwards are missing.
The answer is perfect in terms of presentation and structure.
The 1st part is covered with the right approach.
The balance is perfect in the 2nd part of the answer.
Good presentation and clear writing.
Points are short and crisp.
Briefly discuss the steps taken by the government.
Do give proper way forward.
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The direction of the answer is decent but do add more content in your answer.
UPSC expects more content in 15 marks questions.
This answer would have been perfect if it were 10 marks.
But in 15 marks, under each subheading, try to give at least 6 7 points.
The overall approach is decent.
Good structure.
But way forwards are missing.
Do give proper way forwards.
Read the model answer for all the missing talking points
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Parth sir, please review the remaining answers in September awe.
Hi Sahithya
Sorry I was unwell at that time. With time, I will surely go through the unchecked AWEs. Rest assured.
Good starting point of the answer.
Good that you discussed the SDG goals and UNHRC points.
Excellent discussion in the 1st part of the ain body.
It is good that you linked various fundamental rights with access to the internet.
Good use of flowchart.
The 2nd part has the perfect balance.
The discussion there is exhaustive and yet to the point
Good structure.
Decent language
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The intro and the 1st part of the answers are handled well.
But the issue is with the 2nd part of the answer.
You have mentioned a couple of points regarding the issues with the “internet”. But your discussion should revolve around challenges with the “right to internet.”
Highlight the challenges in providing accessible, affordable and efficient internet services in India.
You can add points like:
Slow roll-out of Wi-Fi hotspots and the slow speed, in comparison to other developed nations.
Most small and medium scale industry is struggling to adapt to modern technology.
Entry-level smartphones have limited capabilities for smooth internet access, and the outreach of the ‘smartphones’ is limited.
There is an absence of enough skilled manpower in digital technology.
Lack of user education and there are limited facilities to train personnel. India needs over one million cybersecurity experts to check and monitor the growing menace of digital crime.
Your points should revolve around the main theme of the question. Do not move out of the periphery too much. Therefore read the questions and mentors comment carefully. They will help you in the structure and talking points of the answer.
The language is decent and the points are small and crisp.