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- In the introduction briefly set the context of the question with some key facts of production of wheat and corn.
- In the body explain first the factors contributing to large production – geographical factors, industrial setup, availability of technology etc.
Then move onto discuss the wheat production in the Northern America. State the facts related to wheat production in the Indian states such as those of Punjab UP and others.
Draw a detailed comparison. - Conclude with importance of production of corn and wheat in general.
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Hi Parakh
Rephrase your introduction.
Though you have done the comparison in a good manner but write under proper subheadings like soil,land-holdings, transport and marketing, storage facilities, government policies etc.,
This will make your answer structured and comparison will be done in a comprehensive manner.
Good conclusion.
Work on handwriting and improve your presentation to get better marks.
Overall a decent attempt.
Keep writing !
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Good introduction.
Do not compare with whole India, the question is asking to draw comparison with some suitable states of India.
State the facts related to wheat production in the Indian states such as those of Punjab UP and others.
Good conclusion.
Work on sentence formation, many of your sentences need to be rephrased.
Keep writing, you will succeed.
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Hi Dakshina
Lackluster introduction, briefly explain some key facts of production of wheat and corn.
You have explained the factors in quite a good manner.
The content is good and well placed.
You have done the comparison in a decent manner.
Good conclusion.
Overall a decent attempt.
Work on handwriting.
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Hi Deepika
Use of flow chart is appreciable but be specific, write factors responsible for large production in North America.
Comparison is done in a comprehensive manner, but adhere to the demand of the question, do not compare with whole India, the question is asking to draw comparison with some suitable states of India. State the facts related to wheat production in the Indian states such as those of Punjab UP and others.
Suggested strategy is good.
Write proper conclusion, conclude with importance of production of corn and wheat in general.
Keep writing, you will succeed.
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Hi Uttam
Lackluster introduction, explain some key facts of production of wheat and corn.
The question is for both corn and wheat in the North America, not only about wheat.
Adhere to the demand of the question.
Work on presentation.
Avoid using short forms like govt.
You have given the same sub-headings in both the parts, so instead of writing like this, make a table and compare, this will save your space as well as make your answer presentable.
Avoid grammatical errors.
Keep writing, you will improve.
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Hi Unnati
Rephrase your introduction, grammatical errors are there.
You have explained the factors responsible for large production of corn and wheat in the North America in a decent manner.
Work on headings , instead of writing ‘India’, give proper heading.
Good conclusion.
Though content is decent, you need to work upon presentation of the answer to get better marks.
Work on grammar, start countries name with capital alphabet.
Improve your handwriting, avoid scribbling.
Make your ‘s’ properly.
Work hard, you will improve.
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Hi PS
Rephrase your introduction, it is not making any sense.
You have explained the factors responsible for large production of corn and wheat in the North America in a comprehensive manner.
You have compared N.A. and India in a good manner, keep it up.
Content is good and well placed.
Good conclusion.
Except the introduction, rest of the content is good and well placed.
Avoid using short forms like govt.
A decent attempt.
Persistence is the key to success, keep writing !