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- https://www.financialexpress.
com/opinion/equity-in- education-matters/2121998/ - In the intro, mention the importance of equity in education.
- In the body, discuss dimensions of equity such as inclusion and fairness which helps every person in achieving his potential irrespective of the circumstances he faces. In the next part, discuss how the shift towards digital education makes it difficult to ensure the adherence to these dimension of equity and how New Education Policy would face the challenge in this regard.
- Conclude by mention the need to take steps to minimise the impact of shift towards digital education on the vulnerable section of the society.
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Hi Somasis
Good introduction.
Your content is good, but instead of writing 2-3 lines, simply give heading, this thing will save you words and will make your answer better structured.
Content wise good attempt, you have met the demand of the answer .
Work on presentation.
Improve handwriting, avoid scribbling.
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Hi Divya
Good introduction.
After writing the introduction, briefly write how we can achieve equity in education, you can take a hint from Somasis answer.
Challenges are discussed in a good manner , try to give subheadings.
Suggested strategy is good.
Conclusion is missing, always end your answer with concluding remarks.
Underline keywords.
Keep writing !
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Hi Vinay
Work on introductory remarks, do not define equity, instead of it, write about the equity in education.
Challenges and suggestions are discussed in a decent manner.
Good conclusion.
Thumbs up for the structure.
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