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- https://indianexpress.com/
article/opinion/columns/ digitising-the-state-6496692/ - In the intro, mention the reforms in the data system could give us the “single source of truth”.
- In the body, as issues mention the data silos, lack of data sharing protocol, incompatibility of data of various state under the same head, obscurity, misclassification etc.Measures for improvement could be a common data standard for all entities receiving government funds, a single searchable website to ascertain the total government funding, end to end data capturing, suitable data governance and technology architecture etc.
- Conclude by mention how this reform could provide assurance that each rupee due to the government has been collected, and each rupee has been spent for the purpose it was allocated.
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Hi Chester
Good introduction, quoting PC Mahalanobis is appreciable.
Issues are well explained.
Briefly explain why a robust data system is the need of the hour, then suggest the measures.
You have suggested the measures quite comprehensively.
Also mention DATA (Digital Accountability and Transparency Act) , try to keep your answer updated with current affairs.
Good conclusion.
Work on presentation and give headings properly.
Avoid using unnecessary capital alphabets in between of a sentence.
Overall a decent attempt.
Keep writing !
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Hi Deepika
Good introduction.
After explaining the current situation, briefly explain why we need a robust data system.
In the issues part, write the basic issue- manual transactions and manual payments often lead to manually entered data at different stages in different databases on different systems.
This makes data unreliable and also sabotages transparency and good governance.
Suggested measures are well explained.
Content is decent and well placed.
Overall a good attempt.
Keep writing,you will succeed.
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Hi Dakshina
Rephrase your introduction.
Give headings properly, instead of writing ‘problems in data’ , you can write ‘issues with current data system’.
Use of flow chart is appreciable.
You have explained the issues and solutions in a comprehensive manner, keep it up.
Good conclusion.
Overall a good attempt.
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Hi Taran
Do not write the solution in the introduction.
India is having many states- is not the issue, manual work in the data system is the probelm.
Some good points in the solution, but add more like need of DGA (Data Governance Authority) and also mention DATA (Digital Accountability and Transparency Act).
Work on content and try to update your content with current affairs.
Rephrase your conclusion.
Work on sentence formation.
Work hard,you will succeed.
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Hi Amandeep
First thing, work on your handwriting, try to write little small and avoid scribbling.
Good introduction.
In this issues part, your 3rd and 4th points can be merged , write crisp and concise so that you can ass more data on the given limit.
Explain briefly why there is a need of digitizing the State.
Enrich your content.
Improve your presentation, underline keywords and follow a proper structure.
Work hard,you will improve.
Kindly review my answer
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Hi Anu
Try to complete your answer in two pages, adhere to word limit.
Good introduction.
You have explained the issues in a decent manner.
Need to add some points in the measures, you can mention DATA (Digital Accountability and Transparency Act), need of DGA (Data Governance Authority) etc.
Rest of the content is good and well placed.
Good conclusion.
Avoid spelling mistakes and do not use short forms.
Overall a decent attempt.
Keep writing,you will succeed.
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Hi Teja
Scan in proper light, your answer is difficult to read.
Give proper headings, you can write ‘issues with current data system’.
Mention the basic issue- manual transactions and manual payments often lead to manually entered data at different stages in different databases on different systems.
This makes data unreliable and also sabotages transparency and good governance.
Measures are well explained.
Good conclusion.
Avoid cutting .
Keep writing,you will improve.
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Hi Unnati
Thumbs up for introduction.
Your answer is well structured.
You have covered the issues and measures in a comprehensive manner
Good conclusion.
Overall a decent attempt.
Improve your handwriting, write ‘s’ properly.
You have the potential of writing good answers, join our Mains Guidance Program for betterment and quality enrichment of your answers.
Keep writing !