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- In the introduction start with general idea of socialism.
- In the body discuss first the idea of socialism in communist countries. Then move on to present the idea of Indian Democratic socialism. Features like – Socialism Combined with Modernism: “Democratic socialism” and the “mixed economy’ demanded equality of opportunities for all and it was the basic theme.Also explain inclusive socialism. Discuss the concept of democratic socialism.
- Conclude with significance of Indian flavor of Socialism.
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Hi Taran
Good introduction.
Before writing communist socialism, write about the Indian socialism as it has been explicitly asked in the question.
Try to catch keywords of the question.
Work on content,democratic socialists favor as much decentralization as possible so write accordingly.
Good conclusion.
Work on presentation and avoid grammatical mistakes.
Work on sentence formation, many of your sentences need to be rephrased.
Keep writing !
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Hi Shubham
Good introduction.
Leave some space after the paragraphs.
You have compared both the socialism in a good manner.
Try to write under subheadings.
Content wise good attempt but need to work on presentation .
Conclusion could be better.
Avoid using short forms.
Keep working hard !
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Hi Dakhsina
Good introduction.
You have compared both types of socialism in a good manner.
After it,move to Indian Democratic socialism. Write features like – Socialism combined
with modernism.
Work on selection of words.
Lackluster conclusion, conclude with significance of Indian flavor of Socialism.
You can write that despite its contributions to Indian economy and society through welfare policies, cooperative societies, planned growth, land reforms etc., socialism in India is yet to achieve all its intended objectives.
Try to diversify your content.
Keep writing !