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- https://www.thehindu.com/opinion/op-ed/why-make-in-india-has-failed/article30601269.ece
- In the intro, briefly state what the ‘Make in India’ is.
- In the main body briefly explain the objectives which were sought to be achieved while launching the scheme and to what extent the desired results are achieved. Also, explain the reasons for falling short of achieving the desired results under ‘Make in India’.
- In conclusion, state the ways to iron out the impediments in the way of the success of the scheme.
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Good intro.
The main theme of the answer was regarding the discussion on achievements as well as the shortfall in the expected outcome of the Make In India scheme.
Hence your main theme should have been that rather than discussing the reasons behind the poor run of the scheme.
Give 4 5 points regarding its success story along with examples and again give 4 5 points regarding its loopholes and not giving desired result and again give examples to prove your point.
Briefly mention the reasons (not more than 4 5 points) and then give your own viewpoint which should be optimistic and link it with the way forward in your answer. This will be the 2nd part of your answer.
This is the ideal structure of the answer as per the demand of the question.
Very good way forwards.
They are apt and to the point.
please review
Poor attempt Dipanshu.
Suddenly I feel that your level has gone down and there is a lack of intensity in your answers.
Take the example of this answer.
You have hardly discussed such a large question in one and a half pages only. UPSC will give you 3 pages for 15 marks questions.
You have not covered various dimensions. Why Make In India is a good scheme? What are its positive results so far? Give examples. What are the issues in the performance of the scheme? Again give examples. What is your opinion about the success/failure of the scheme? What is the concrete way forward to make the scheme a success story? Conclusion.
This was supposed to be the mandate of this question which you completed in a weak manner.
The overall content lacks depth and only the discussion on the issues with the scheme is done in a decent manner.
Rest else is half baked and half attempted.
Earlier the only issue used to be your presentation while your content used to good. So get that energy level back and do not disappoint me!
Get up on your feet again Champ!
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A better way forward would have made this an awesome answer.
Your main body of the answer is very good.
The necessary depth in the content is there to see in your answer.
The content is well placed and paced and the presentation is fine.
The explanation is short and crisp and the examples/data given in the points are good.
But do give concrete way forward separately. never pass off your suggestions/solutions/steps needed as your conclusion. That is different. Way forward needs to be discussed like your main body with proper subheadings and 5 6 points regarding what needs to be done to improve the situation.
Read the model answer when it’s available to get talking points on way forward.
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There are only 2 minor issues in your answer.
One is that you have not written a conclusion.
Second is that you have not underlined key elements of your answer.
The rest of the answer is pitch-perfect.
In terms of the content, the answer is an absolute gem.
The language is crisp and points are well explained.
The structure is lucid and well put out dimensions there.
The overall answer is near perfect.
To make the X-Factor work in your favour, do use flowcharts in some of your answers when the question demands so many dimensions to be discussed. This will save you time and space which are the gold in the real exam.
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