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- https://indianexpress.com/article/opinion/columns/india-constitution-secularism-caa-nrc-bjp-6201235/
- The article elaborates on the quality of ongoing political and social discourse on the issue of secularism in India and focuses mainly on the problems associated with the shortcomings in the argument of the supporters of secularism.
- In the intro, briefly explain secularism in India and why its significance is debated in those days.
- In the main body explain what are the issues with the argument put forward by the supporters of secularism- like taking for granted that secularism is good for the country and citing constitution in their support without elaborating on its principled and practical importance.
- Conclude by stressing the need for a change in the debate in support of secularism based on principles (equality and freedom) and practical (no country can flourish by degrading its minority) utility.
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The direction of the answer is very good.
You got the hang of the question.
The tabular form of discussion is very good.
It covers all the major arguments needed in the answer.
The structure is very good.
The conclusion is very good.
It is optimistic and not at all preachy.
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A very good discussion overall.
You got the demand of the question perfectly.
Good content in the main body.
The structure is superb.
But avoid large statements.
Generally, your statements should be around 10-12 words.
Very good way forward
Decent intro and conclusion.
The balance of the answer is perfect and it covers arguments from both sides in the right manner.
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You did not answer the main demand of the question.
In the main body, you were supposed to explain what are the issues with the argument put forward by the supporters of secularism- like taking for granted that secularism is good for the country and citing constitution in their support without elaborating on its principled and practical importance.
Your main area of discussion has been regarding the importance of secularism and points put forward by its supporters.
Avoid general statements like India needs to adopt true secularism. What should that true secularism be? Without elaborating on this aspect, there is no point in writing this statement.
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