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- In the introduction briefly explain what wetlands are.
- In the body first explain why it is important to save wetlands? What kinds of challenges do they face in India? Discuss the causative factors such as – urbanization, agriculture expansion and pollution etc. Explain the link between health of Wetlands and the water, food and climate factor. Discuss methods and means of saving the Wetland ecosystem and essence of it. Highlight the efforts being made in this direction by the Government of India.
- Conclude by reasserting the significance of wetland ecosystems.
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Hi Taran
In the introduction, you can also mention the world wetland day and its theme.
Do not write just bullet points, try to explain each of them in one or two lines.
Write about the developmental crisis caused by this biodiversity crisis.
Selection of words is very important to fetch better marks.
Write about the importance of wetlands to the ecosystem, you can write points like wetlands are among the most productive ecosystems in the world, comparable to rain forests and coral reefs.
Try to diversify your content.
Write various programme and policies like National Wetland Conservation Programme .
Conclusion is missing, conclude by reasserting the significance of wetland ecosystems.
Plan the structure before writing the answer.
Do not get demotivated by the marks, keep writing, you will improve.
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Well drafted!! but the intro could have been more particular about Wetlands rather the placed where these wetlands are vulnerable.
Overall good answer. Handwriting is good.
Hi Dakshina
Lackluster introduction, first explain what do you mean by wetlands then write about the degradation.
Need to more points in the causes part, you can write about deforestation, hydrologic and anthopogenic activities,pollution, aquaculture and climate change,
Need to enrich and diversify your content.
Write about the importance of wetlands to the ecosystem, you can write points like wetlands are among the most productive ecosystems in the world, comparable to rain forests and coral reefs.
Write various programme and policies like National Wetland Conservation Programme .
Conclusion is missing, conclude by reasserting the significance of wetland ecosystems.
Work on content and structure of the answer.
Keep writing, you will improve.
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Hi Unnati
First thing, work on your handwriting, write neat and legible,avoid scribbling.
Good introduction.
Make flow chart only when you do not have to explain the points, work on space management, either make or flow chart or write in points.
Causes of wetland degradation are well explained.
You have explained the importance of wetlands in a decent manner.
Try to diversify your content.
Write various programme and policies like National Wetland Conservation Programme under the prevention part.
Good conclusion.
Work on presentation.
Overall a good attempt.
Keep writing !