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- India’s dependence on oil has always been its weakness which has always exposed it to security threats and economic threats whenever the region from which it’s oil come turns turbulent.
- In the intro part of the answer describe how science could help India wean away from oil.
- In the main body of the answer describe the new developments like electric cars, development of battery technologies, fuel cells, solar energy, wind energy, geothermal energy, nuclear energy, etc. and how all these could help India to reach the goal. Also, describe some initiative launched by the Government in this direction.
- Conclude the answer on a positive note that the said initiatives could help India in reducing its dependence.
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The structure and length of some portions can be altered to make it a better answer.
In the 1st part of the answer, you have to briefly discuss the statement of the question and explain in some points why dependency on oil is a major issue for India. It can be a financial angle or geopolitics or environmental.
Then only jump to the discussion on how S&T can help India in this regard.
Secondly, the discussion on the government interventions needs to be curtailed. It is too lengthy. The prime focus should be on the S&T portion.
The overall content is well managed and it is exhaustive.
The language is also decent.
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A very good intro.
The main body of the answer is decently managed.
But do give inputs on the challenges as well. Discuss what are the challenges in the S&T field to harness other sources of energy.
In the last part of the answer, do discuss the way forward and the recent initiatives taken by the govt. The statement of increased tariff is a decent point but give more points like that.
The overall content is Ok and well explained.
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Never copy the exact statement of the question (chink in its armour) as your content of the intro or main body. The intro needs to be better. The connection of GDP and Oil is not fitting properly and hence a better intro is needed.
The angles discussed in the flowchart are very good. They could have been elaborated in a better manner but here you will get the benefit of the doubt.
The second part’s subheading has no mention of S&T in it. So how can an examiner guess that your way forwards is talking about the role of S&T in reducing the dependence of oil in India?
Your overall way forward are general and has no discussion regarding the role of S&T there. That makes your answer weak because that was the main demand of the question.
You have perhaps the misinterpreted the whole question and discussed how India can switch to alternative sources of energy in the answer.
But the main question was: “discuss how India could leverage science and technology to end its dependence on oil?”
Therefore I ask each one of you to read the questions carefully and break it into small pieces so that you can answer in a holistic manner.
In the end, do discuss the steps taken by the government to leverage S&T in reducing the dependence on Oil.
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Everything is very good except for the 1st part of the answer.
In the 1st part of the answer, you have to briefly discuss the statement of the question and explain in some points why dependency on oil is a major issue for India. It can be a financial angle or geopolitics or environmental.
The overall discussion is very good and the structure of the main body is decent.
The 2nd part is well managed and you have some very good way forwards.
But do give some concluding remarks in your answers to make a perfect soft landing of the answer.
Good content all in all.
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A very good answer.
You have covered the demand of the question in an apt manner.
The dimensions covered under the 1st part are very good.
The points are well placed.
A very good presentation.
The content is in-depth and has decent coverage.
The intro and conclusion are perfect.
Keep it up.
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