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- Introduce the answer with the rich legacy of the national movement and its various manifestations.
- Substantiate with examples how civil liberties formed an important legacy.
- Conclude accordingly.
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Chandan
This is not a GS2 question or post-independence question.
You need to elaborate on how the freedom movement promoted civil liberties.
In intro, you can mention some of the major legacies of the freedom movement such as secularism, independent foreign policy, mass participation in politics, science based development and civil liberties.
In the body, points like freedom of press needs to be elaborated with some examples of the struggle of Indian leaders over this issue. Further demanding adult franchise, preparation of a national constitution in 1928, formation of Indian Civil Liberties Union(ICLU) in 1936, promotion of representative democracy can all be mentioned.
In conclusion, you can talk about how modern day India and its Constitution has been inspired from that struggle and provided for articles like 19,20,21 etc
Keep practicing. Read a bit more about the topic.
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Apurva
Decent attempt. Both presentation and content are fine.
Intro is good, nice use of flowchart; you can mention civil liberties in one of the boxes as it was also one of the legacies.
Points in the body are good, freedom of press needs to be elaborated a bit by using examples of leaders like SN Banerjee, Tilak etc who went to jail over their struggle on this issue.
Preparation of a national constitution in 1928(Nehru Report) can also be mentioned in point no. 3.
Also, formation of Indian Civil Liberties Union(ICLU) in 1936 under J. L. Nehru’s initiative and promotion of representative democracy can be mentioned.
Other points are fine.
Conclusion is giod.
Keep practicing, try to enrich your answer with some facts and examples wherever possible. 🙂
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Hello
You have restricted the scope of the answer by just talking about liberty, civil liberties are a broader concept. Plus, the same thing has been explained twice.. Try to include events, incidents and examples from the national movement to show how our founding fathers were committed to the idea of civil liberty.
Intro is fine, legacies can be mentioned in one line.. Plus you can include secularism, independent foreign policy, mass participation in politics, science based development etc in legacies.
In the body, points like freedom of press needs to be elaborated with some examples of the struggle of Indian leaders over this issue. (SN Banerjee, Tilak)..Further demanding adult franchise, preparation of a national constitution in 1928, formation of Indian Civil Liberties Union(ICLU) in 1936, promotion of representative democracy can be mentioned.
Conclusion is fine.
Need to work on the content. Keep practicing. 🙂
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Pranav
Introduction is okay, in major legacies, you can mention secularism, independent foreign policy, mass participation in politics etc too… Rule of law can be avoided..
In the body, you need to work a bit on the content, point no. 3 is okay but that can be said to predate national movement.. Other points look very generic..
Points like freedom of press needs to be elaborated with some examples of the struggle of Indian leaders over this issue. (SN Banerjee, Tilak)..Further demanding adult franchise, preparation of a national constitution in 1928, formation of Indian Civil Liberties Union(ICLU) in 1936, promotion of representative
democracy can all be mentioned.
Conclusion is fine.
Keep practicing. 🙂
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Sushant
Good attempt, nice that you have mentioned incidents and examples.
Introduction is good; secularism, independent foreign policy, mass participation in politics etc can be added in legacies.
Content is fine, promotion of representative democracy,
formation of Indian Civil Liberties Union(ICLU) in 1936 under J. L. Nehru’s initiative and demand for adult franchise can be added.
Conclusion is fine.
Keep practicing. 🙂
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