Mentor’s Comments-
- Introduce by mentioning children being biggest victims of pandemic.
- In the body, discuss impact of pandemic on children’s education, physical and mental wellbeing.
- Conclude with need of solidarity and government interventions for children welfare in pandemic.
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Decent attempt.
Introduction is good.
Effects mentioned are also fine. Presentation can be improved a bit. One section could be dedicated to effects on education and the other to physical, social and mental well-being of children.
Points such as drop-outs, career gaps are good and could be mentioned in the education section. Further, you could also talk about learning poverty (loss of reading and foundational literacy) and disproportionate impacts on marginalized sections such as SC/STs here. If you can substantiate some of your points via data/reports, it would be impressive.
Other effects mentioned such as malnutrition, gender inequity, mental health, abuse etc are good. You can also mention some of the negative emotions such as fear, grief, isolation etc which took a toll on children.
Conclusion is fine but a bit long which can be made more crisp.
Keep practicing. 🙂
6.5/15