Mentor’s Comments-
- Giving a brief introduction, bring out various initiatives taken to eradicate malnutrition.
- Explain the extent of malnutrition, which still remains a concern.
- Analyse the reasons for such a situation and conclude accordingly.
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Mentor’s Comments-
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Arifa
Your understanding is good, presentation needs to be improved a bit.
Don’t start mentioning serial numbers from the very first line.
Write a introduction, give some data to back it. You have written well, ‘more sufficient nutrients present in food’ can be avoided, malnutrition is about lack of nutrients. Factual data mentioned is fine, you can also mention ranking in Global Hunger Index.
Next, in the body first give a subheading and then write points under it for example ‘Initiatives taken’-list down 5-6 with brief objectives( you have written, just organize), then next subheading ‘reasons’- poverty, illiteracy regarding nutrition, monoculture, poor implementation of schemes, exclusion of poor etc
Then mention a brief way forward( keep it concise) and finally a concluding statement.
If you have more content, you can use flowcharts to tackle some parts of the answer- for example in way forward here, you can make 5-6 arrows and write the points in brief.
Keep practicing. 🙂
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Chetan
You have started well. Introduction is fine. However, the answer overall looks like an essay. Some important parts are missing too.
After intro, give some factual data to show the situation of malnutrition in India, you can mention ranking in Global Hunger Index, % of stunted, wasted and anaemic population etc. Mention of some deeply affected states is fine.
Next, mention a subsection on initiatives taken by the govt.. National nutrition mission, matritva sahyog yojana, NFSA, PDS, Mid day meals etc should be mentioned. Food fortification, GM crops etc can be mentioned here only.
In next section, mention the reasons for such situation..poverty is fine, other reasons that you can mention are unsafe drinking water, poor sanitation, climate shocks, illiteracy and unemployment etc
Conclusion is too long, before concluding write a brief way forward(2-3 points). Conclusion should be max 1-2 lines.
Keep practicing. 🙂
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Siddharth
Decent attempt. Structure of your answer is good.
Introduction is fine. In first line, you can also explain malnutrition briefly. Mention of Hunger Index is good. Some more data regarding stunting, wasting, anaemia can be mentioned.
Implications can be kept concise. Try to make a flowchart and write points in shorthand.
Govt initiatives part is fine, NFSA, Mid-day meal, Matritva Sahyog Yojana can also be written.
In reasons, vicious cycle of poverty-unemployment-malnutrition can be written. A small diagram will be good.
Other reasons like climate shocks, unsafe drinking water, poor sanitation etc can also be incorporated.
Way forward is fine.
Write a conclusion.
Give more focus/space to areas which are exclusively asked in the question.
Keep practicing. 🙂
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Likhitha
Good attempt. You have covered all parts of the question, content is good, structure is also fine.
You can use flowcharts to tackle some sections, it will improve the presentation of the answer.
Introduction is fine, some more data regarding current malnutrition status in India can be mentioned. You can incorporate ranking in Hunger Index, stunting, wasting, anaemia data etc
Reasons mentioned are good. Climate shocks, poor implementation of govt schemes, exclusion of beneficiaries etc can also be mentioned.
In govt initiatives part, National Food Security Act, Mid day meal, food fortification etc can be included.
Way forward and conclusion are good
Keep practicing. 🙂