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Introduction
Write about the rise of leftism under special political-economic circumstances in India. Mention it’s three streams i.e. Communist, within Congress and other organisations like HSRA, forward bloc
Body-
Mention varies factors responsible for the rise of left.
Then write about rise and growth with in Congress.
In the last section write points Related to influence of leftism under its socio-economic agenda of the Congress.
Conclusion
Bring out the long term impact of left ideologies on post independent developmental program of India.
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Well articulated, U can give examples of MN Roy, Bhagat Singh, Subhash Chandra Bose, 5 year plans, 42nd Amendment socialist pattern, Fundamental duties, Socioeconomic political justice etc
7/15
Sumita,
Your whole write up on the first page needs to be concise. This can be summed up as 5-6 line Introduction which would be more impactful plus it will avoid repetition of many points.
I have pointed out to you earlier at many occasions that you should write concise points. For example under heading of Russian Revolution there is no need to give details of evolution just write ideals like social justice, equality etc that influenced Indians and Add more points in this section.
In next section rise and growth with in Congress add points like Openness of Congress to new ideas, even moderates like Dada Bhai were influenced by Left ideology his economic critique is it’s biggest evidence and he also participated in Socialist Conference of 1904 in Amsterdam, impact of Economic depression and inflation etc.
Last section is written fine but you need to quote facts here to give depth to your Arguments like Resolution on FRs in Karachi Session.
Conclusion is fine.
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Shubhashree,
There are factual errors in your Introduction. Socialist thought get strengthen by the Russian Revolution but they were already presented in India. Moderate leaders like Dada Bhai were influenced by Left ideology his economic critique is it’s biggest evidence and he also participated in international Socialist Conference of 1904 in Amsterdam.
HRA of Bismil became HSRA under the thoughts of Bhagat singh earlier it didn’t have strong ideological background except that they want Swaraj what ever be the cost.
These errors may seems small but they put question mark on your whole knowledge of the topic so have more clarity and avoid making such errors.
Reasons for rise of leftism is Written fine though more points can be added here.
In next section you need to write specific points for rise of leftism in Congress. And then it’s growth.
You have only Written impact of leftism on Congress’ program.
Though writing Negative impact is beyond the scope of the question still points you have Written are neither logical nor justifiable.
Mold your Arguments in better form and give facts to substantiate.
Socialism in India is not as it was in Russia. It’s have clear national development goals at core of it.
India practiced mixed economic model which is now more balanced in favour of capitalism so it did have ideological flexibility.
Conclusion can be written Better.
Keep writing for further Improvement 🙂
5.5/15
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Utkarsha,
Leftist ideological influence can be traced way back to Moderate leaders. moderates like Dada Bhai were influenced by Left ideology his economic critique is it’s biggest evidence and he also participated in Socialist Conference of 1904 in Amsterdam.
Write full form of name of organisations and mention acronym in brackets if you want to use them further in your answer.
Factors written fine though more points can be added.
In next section you need to write factors for rise of socialism in Congress separately.
In growth Section you had to so the evolution from Naoroji to C(s)P. Points you have Written under this section should have Written under impact on Congress agenda.
So you need to rearrange the arguments. Conclusion is fine.
Utkarsha first thing is that making diagram is not necessary what is more important is to have the write content and which is presented in a way that addresses the demand of questions.
Now I said that the diagram you drawn looks informal because you had drawn it for an spiritual and philosophical idea in first case which is oversimplification.
In second after writing Social Group there is no need to draw x-ray images as term is self explanatory.
Without them it looks better.
Anudeep used to draw diagram for area such as Governance and where ever it’s relevant. You have taken the cue from the way diagrams are drawn but you need to look them holistically. You need not to copy everything from a topper rather look their answer as a whole. Develop your own style.
Again it’s not necessary to draw the diagram your marks will not be deducted if you have the right content and presented it correctly. And if you find it essentially to draw a diagram to convey your ideas more effectively than you should present it in a form that an Officer would present to a Minister.
I hope it clear your doubt.
Keep Practicing 🙂
6.5/15,
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Naresh,
Your Introduction is well Written but it you should write various left organization in chronology. Also write fullform of HSRA.
Factors are Written fine. In the next Section you had to write Reasons for rise of leftism in Congress separately and had to trace it growth in Congress from Moderates i.e. DadaBhai Nauroji to C(S)P.
More points needs to be Written impact on Congress’ agenda.
M.N. Roy was neither a congress member nor associated with the National Planning commission 1938. Avoid making such factual errors.
Conclusion is very lengthy and few things Mention are beyond the scope of the Question. Write smaller paragraphs. You can write better Conclusion by pointing out influence of left ideology in our Constitution and national developement approach of Govt which is inclusive.
You have fine knowledge about the topic just address all the Aspects of the Question with due regard.
Keep writing 🙂
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Fauziya,
My words may seem harsh to you but they way you have written is very poor.
You answer is like personal notes that you have written for your own understanding. Rather these are Practice exercise. Here you need to write the answer in the way you will write in Mains of CSE.
You are going to write answer for the most prestigious exam of the Nation have some Respect for it and maintain dignity of the process.
Points you have Written are fine but the way you have written your answer is incomprehensible.
Give proper Introduction.
Address each part of the question properly. Present proper argument as per the demand of the question.
I am not awarding you any marks for this question. From next time I expect you to write answer properly, if you really want to improve.
Read others’ answer for better understanding.
Keep Practicing.
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Ankita,
You have taken more then one page to write your Introduction. Concise it and used arguments Written here in relevant sections to avoid repetition.
You need to Improve your presentation. It’s hard to distinguish various sections.
After factors you have essentially Written Political activities that have taken place rather you should write what is asked in the question.
You need to write more specific points Related to rise of leftism in Congress in addition of CDM illusion.
Then you had to trace it’s growth from Moderates to C(s)P then you had to show impact of leftism on Congress’ socio-economic agenda.
You have shown good Improvement but I don’t expect you to repeat the mistakes. Always stay focused on the demand of the question. Address all the sections properly.
Keep practicing 🙂
5.5/15
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