Mentor’s Comments-
- Start with a short introduction on the disability and affected people.
- Highlight the status of the disabled people in India.
- List India’s initiatives especially institutional measures in this regard.
- Conclude appropriately.
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Mentor’s Comments-
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Mahima
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Your answer is good. Introduction is fine, you can add some data point such as population of disabled people in India according to census 2011.
Barriers mentioned are fine too, however, you can provide the explanation with each point itself. No need to again repeat those while explanation, eats up unnecessary space. Further some issues such as inaccessible public transportation and lack of relevant assistive technology can be mentioned too.
Measures taken by government part is also okay, you could have mentioned Rights of Persons with disabilities Act 2016, which increased the coverage as well as reservation benefits.
Conclusion part is fine, a brief way forward can be mentioned before that.
Overall decent attempt, but rather than repeating points try to diversify content, use flowcharts and all if necessary.
Keep practicing. 🙂
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Pranav
Decent attempt, some points are missing here and there which can be incorporated for better answer.
Introduction is fine, you can add some data point such as population of disabled people in India according to census 2011.
In barriers also talk about social stigma and ridicule they face, often resulting in depression and mental health issues. Other points are fine.
Government measures are fine, provision of reservation in PWD act can be mentioned, Accessible India campaign and schemes like Deendayal Rehabilitation Scheme and ADIP should also find a mention.
Conclusion is fine.
Keep practicing. 🙂
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Payal
Good attempt. Introduction is good.
Barriers mentioned are also fine. Use of flowchart is nice. You can mention about social stigma and ostracisation here only which leads to many cases of depression and mental health problems.
Government measures part is fine too, Rights of pwd act can be mentioned before point no. 2 only as it contains the provision of reservations.
Additionally, schemes like Deendayal Disabled Rehabilitation Scheme and Assistance to Disabled Persons for purchase of Aids and appliances (ADIP) can be mentioned too.
Conclusion is decent but you can make it a bit crisp and concise.
Keep practicing. 🙂
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Akshada
Very good attempt. Both presentation and content are fine. Intro is good.
Barriers mentioned are fine.
In government measures, you can explain some of the provisions of Rights of Persons with Disabilities Act after you have mentioned it for example increased coverage, reservations etc
Other points are good.
Conclusion is fine too.
Keep practicing. 🙂
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Naveen
Good attempt. Introduction is fine, you can add some data point such as population of disabled people in India according to census 2011.
Use of flowchart is nice, barriers have been mentioned.
Government measures are also neatly presented, however, some measures like Deendayal Disabled Rehabilitation Scheme and Assistance to Disabled Persons for purchase of Aids and appliances (ADIP) are missing which can be incorporated.
Conclusion is good.
Keep practicing. 🙂
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