Mentor’s Comments-
In the intro, mention India’s musical heritage with some examples.
In the body, highlight the evolution of Khyal and its significance. Then mention, the evolution of Thumri and its significance. Also, mention the major proponents of both.
Conclude suitably.
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Pradipti,
Nice attempt. You have fair idea about the topic. The structure is also good.
You have written the features of Khyal and Thumri in detail.
Also write significance of Khyal and Thumri.
Mention influence of these style in building composite culture. You can mention this in conclusion.
Overall answer is satisfactory.
Keep practising.