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Define jet streams with examples in introduction.
In Body first discuss their impact in influencing the weather conditions across the world in brief.
then write in detail about the impact of jet streams on Indian weather conditions like Monsoon, Western disturbances, cyclones etc.
Conclude Suitably.
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Shubhashree,
Overall all this is a decent Answer. You used Diagram Aptly in the second section. Same could have done for Global section.
You should quote specific weather related phenomenon influenced by jet stream to make your answer more impactful like Polar vortex, intensity of mid latitude cyclones, mention specific local weather conditions caused globally by jet streams like hot Desert type dry climate on the west coast due to westerly etc.
In the same wave more diversity to the discussion can be given in Indian weather section by adding western disturbances, cyclones etc in to the discussion.
Nevertheless it is overall a fine Attempt.
I’m sorry for delayed evaluations. However I hope that my suugestions will help in writing better answers.
I wish you all the best for the preliminary examination. Stay in touch with Mains answer Writing Atleast till the 15-20th of aug. After that your sole focus should be Prelims. Work hard, study hard and stay calm, calmer you’ll be in exam hall on the day of Prelims sharper will the brain work and brighter will be the chance of yours to go through the preliminary.
Good Luck 🙂
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Ankita,
In this Answer you have Written what all you know about the jet streams and very little about what is asked in the question.
Question doesn’t ask you to write types rather you had to show how these influence the weather around the globe.
Write specific weather related phenomenon influenced by jet stream to make your answer more relatable to the demand of the Question mention conditions like Polar vortex, intensity of mid latitude cyclones, mention specific local weather conditions caused globally by jet streams like hot Desert type dry climate on the west coast due to westerly etc.
In the same wave more diversity to the discussion beyond monsoon can be given in Indian weather section by adding western disturbances, cyclones etc in to the discussion.
Some diagrams can also be drawn.
Stay focus to the demand of the question.
I wish you all the best for the preliminary examination. Stay in touch with Mains answer Writing Atleast till the 15-20th of aug. After that your sole focus should be Prelims. Work hard, study hard and stay calm, calmer you’ll be in exam hall on the day of Prelims sharper will the brain work and brighter will be the chance of yours to go through the preliminary.
Good Luck 🙂
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Sehaj,
Your Introduction is fine. Presentation is also fine. However foll are the Issues with the Answer:
1. You should write a 10 marks question in 2 pages only. Stick to upsc standard in Practice.
2. You have written only one part of the Question missed effect of jet streams on Global weather.
You should address all the section of the Question.
3. Always label your diagrams, maps etc. Without which they doesn’t make any sense.
4. Avoid writing on the margins as UPSC levy heavy Penalty for this. It went as high as 25 marks in 2019. So avoid that.
Try to work upon the Suggestions given to you. All the best and keep Practicing 🙂
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Kartikey,
Your Introduction is very well articulated. Conclusion is fine.
Diagram is not labelled. Give proper label to make sense.
You have Written influence on Indian part well but you need to give more details about global weather also.
Mention name of specific stream add more point such as local weather conditions caused globally by jet streams like hot Desert type dry climate on the west coast due to westerly, Global warming due to vertical air circulation which causes rapid rate of mixing of air between troposphere and stratosphere, which helps in transport of anthropogenic pollutants like CFCs from troposphere to stratosphere.
Rest is fine. All the best and Keep Practicing 🙂
4.5/10
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Arpit,
Overall you have Written a good Answer. Content is good, structure and presentation is also fine.
To make sense of diagram you need to label it clearly.
You have Written influence on Indian part very well, you can draw a small diagram for this section as well.
However you need to give more details about global weather which is very generic in present form.
Mention name of specific stream add more arguments such as local weather conditions caused globally by jet streams like hot Desert type dry climate on the west coast due to westerly, Global warming due to vertical air circulation which causes rapid rate of mixing of air between troposphere and stratosphere, which helps in transport of anthropogenic pollutants like CFCs from troposphere to stratosphere.
Rest is fine.
I’m sorry for delayed evaluations. However I hope that it will help you in writing better answers.
I wish you all the best for the preliminary examination. Stay in touch with Mains answer Writing Atleast till the 15-20th of aug. After that your sole focus should be Prelims. Work hard, study hard and stay calm, calmer you’ll be in exam hall on the day of Prelims sharper will the brain work and brighter will be the chance of yours to go through the preliminary.
Good Luck 🙂
4.5/10