Mentor’s Comments-
- Introduce by mentioning the proposal of the government and some of the previous laws regarding marriage which will need to be amended.
- In the body, talk about ways in which the legislation will help women- women empowerment, improve the nutrition of mother and infants, reduce child marriages etc
- Mention some drawbacks of the move- criminalize poor women marrying between 18 to 21, increase vulnerability of women marry against their parents’ will etc
- In way forward mention about the Jaya Jaitley taskforce and some of its other recommendations.
- Conclude suitably.
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Muskan
Decent attempt.
Intro is good, however you can mention some of the previous laws that need to be amended, resistance through personal laws can also be mentioned.
Content of the answer is good.
In drawbacks you can also mention criminalization of women marrying between 18 and 21, adverse effect on poor women etc
Other points are fine.
Way forward and conclusion are also good.
Keep practicing. 🙂
please review.
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Aarti
Introduction is good, historical background and benefits are also nicely explained.
However, in criticism it seems you have got emotional. Just think from exam perspective and mention some points like criminalisation of women marrying between 18 and 21 in addition to social issued they face; parents can file case if children marry against their wishes, effect on poor families etc
In way forward mention some other recommendations of Jaya Jaitley taskforce.
Other points are good.
Conclusion is fine.
Keep writing. 🙂