Mentor’s Comments-
- Explain the meaning of the term “secularism” in the Indian context.
- Mention the constitutional provisions related to secularism in India.
- Highlight the misuse/abuse of the principle.
- Conclude appropriately.
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Mentor’s Comments-
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Sadhvi
Structure of the answer is good, your knowledge is also fine, some improvements can be made.
In intro, you have written disassociation of state from religion, instead of that you can mention that Indian secularism is about being respectful to all religions and at the same time maintaining a principled arm distance. Sarv dharm sambhav can be written too.
Constitutional part is good, nice use of flowchart, can explain Ar 25-28 a bit.
In practice, you have gone with only the negatives, points are fine, but you can also mention how state has sometimes taken a reformative stance in pursuit of secularism with examples like temple entry for everyone, repeal of triple talaq, judicial reform of Hindu personal law, constitutional ban on untouchability etc
This will make your answer more holistic.
Way forward is fine. You can finish with a concluding statement.
Keep practicing. 🙂
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Karun
Intro is fine.
In the body too, you have written good points.
Constitutional articles can be mentioned for better impact in first section, ar 14,15,16- prohibits discrimination on the basis of religion, briefly articles 25-30 can also be mentioned, the question has emphasis on constitutional dimension.
Next two subsections can be divided on the basis of positive aspects of contemporary secularism and negative aspects. That will give better structure to the answer.
In positives, reformative steps like temple entry for everyone, repeal of triple talaq, judicial reform of Hindu personal law, constitutional ban on untouchability, Shah Bano judgement etc
Next you can mention the negatives such as issue of vote bank politics, fundamentalism in religions and some of the debates in practices that you have written.
Conclusion is fine.
Keep writing. 🙂
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Alka
Decent attempt, structure of answer is good, your knowledge is also fine.
In intro, it would be better if you can talk about Indian secularism that is the concept of principled distance as well as being respectful of all religions rather than talking about secularism in general.
Constitutional provisions are well written, contemporary threats are also mentioned, you can also talk about religious fundamentalism.
Further, you can also mention how state has sometimes taken a reformative stance in pursuit of secularism with examples like temple entry for everyone, repeal of triple talaq, judicial reform of Hindu personal law, constitutional ban on untouchability, Shah Bano judgement etc
This will make your answer more holistic.
A brief way forward mentioning need of incorporating UCC, increasing awareness etc can be written too.
Conclusion is fine.
Keep practicing. 🙂
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Shanmugadevi
Decent attempt.
Introduction is good.
Constitutional provisions are also well-written, good that you have written articles.
Contemporary threats part are also fine.
However, over the years the country has remained by and large secular.
So, you can mention some positive aspects too, especially where the state has taken a reformative stance in pursuit of secularism- temple entry for everyone, repeal of triple talaq, judicial reform of Hindu personal law, constitutional ban on untouchability, Shah Bano judgement, peaceful resolution of Ayodhya dispute etc
Also, a brief way forward can be written- need to increase awareness, legal provisions for hate speech, incorporating UCC etc
Conclusion is fine.
Keep practicing. 🙂
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Likhita
Most of your answer is fine, good understanding of the topic.
Intro is good, in constitutional provisions points are good, however provisions relating to article 25-28 can be explained a bit.
Challenges mentioned are also fine, however, over the years the country has remained by and large secular.
So, you can mention some positive aspects too, especially where the state has taken a reformative stance in pursuit of secularism- temple entry for everyone, repeal of triple talaq, judicial reform of Hindu personal law, constitutional ban on untouchability, Shah Bano judgement, peaceful resolution of Ayodhya dispute etc
Way forward and conclusion are fine, incorporating UCC can be mentioned.
Keep practicing. 🙂
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Priyanka
Introduction is fine, constitutional articles have been mentioned, that is good, however ar 26 doesn’t give freedom to make a religious constitution, you can frame it better, freedom of managing religious affairs is granted. Further articles 25-28 can be explained a bit better on the whole.
Contemporary issues are fine, examples like reversal of Shah Bano judgement in vote bank politics can also be mentioned.
However, over the years the country has remained by and large secular.
So, you can mention some positive aspects too, especially where the state has taken a reformative stance in pursuit of secularism- temple entry for everyone, repeal of triple talaq, judicial reform of Hindu personal law, constitutional ban on untouchability, peaceful resolution of Ayodhya dispute etc
Way forward is fine, incorporating UCC can be mentioned. One line conclusion will be good.
Keep practicing. 🙂