Mentor’s Comments-
- In introduction, briefly mention the status of persons with disability in India.
- In the body, highlight the approach of the state in alleviating the challenges faced by the persons with disability.
- Discuss the need to adopt a rights-based approach in India.
- Conclude accordingly.
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Muskan,
Nice attempt.
You have written many points which shows you have fair idea of the topic.
However the demand of the question is not properly met.
You have focused on the steps taken by the government for the persons with disabilities.
However the question requires why rights based approach is needed.
Elaborate the shortcomings of charity based approaches.
Discuss the benefits of rights based approaches.
Then you can support the points with government steps.
You have good command over the topic.
Read the question carefully.
Keep writing.