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- In the introduction, give some statistics about tribal health in India.
- In the body, list down the reasons for poor tribal health in India.
- Suggest some measures to improve the situation.
- Conclude by mentioning some of the steps taken in this regard.Also mention that there is a lot of scope for improvement.
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Muskan,
Good attempt. good that you have mentioned about COVID effect in the introduction part. Try to support the poor condition of Tribals in health indicator by quoting some data or report. Try to corelate the poor performance in health indicator with lack of infrastructure, illiteracy, political backwardness. You can mention some committee recommendations in the conclusion part. Other parts are nicely answered. Overall a satisfactory answer.
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Arpita,
Good answer. All the parts of the question has been answered. All the major dimensions are covered. In the steps taken, do mention some of the government schemes or specific steps taken by the government. Good that you have mentioned 1-2 data regarding child sex ratio and BPL. You can mention Committee recommendations to make your answer more specific. All the points written are relevant. Overall a good answer.
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Siddharth,
Good answer. Introduction is very good. The mention of data adds value to the answer as it supports the first statement of the question. All the parts of the question has been answered. You can also mention about COVID and the tribal population health condition. Do mention some of the recommendations made by the Committees. Overall a good answer.
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Anshuman,
Good attempt. Introduction is very good. The mention of data to support the statement of the question adds value. The points mentioned in reasons and steps taken are relevant. To make the answer more specific quote the recommendations of some of the Committees or reports from the Ministry. You can also write about COVID as further enhancing gap in the health indicators. Overall a good answer.
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Ashok,
Good attempt. Good that you have quoted data in the introduction. However try to use comparative data to show that tribal health indicators are worse. Good that you have segregated the reasons into various sub-headings which make the answer more holistic. You can also mention about COVID pandemic. Do write a proper conclusion which is missing. Stick to the word limits. Overall a good answer.
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Liya,
Very good answer. All the parts of the question has been answered. All the points that you have mentioned is properly supported by data which makes the answer holistic and specific. Good that you have used comparative data to show how tribal health indicators are worse than non-tribals. You should also mention about COVID pandemic which enhanced the gap in health indicators. Write a futuristic conclusion quoting Constitutional obligations, SDG targets, Committee recommendations. Overall a very good answer.
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Saran,
Good attempt. All the parts of the question has been answered. However the answer is very generic. Try to quote some data or reports to support your arguments. You should talk about COVID pandemic as well. Write a more futuristic conclusion in 2-3 statements. You should mention some of the recommendations made by Committees and Ministry. Overall a good attempt.
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Nandhini,
Good attempt. All the parts of the question has been answered. Try to quote some data or reports to support your arguments and also to show comparative scenario of health indicators of tribals and non-tribals. You can use the present Pandemic condition to add more points. You can quote recommendations from some Committees or Ministry to make the answer more specific. Overall a good attempt.
Keep writing.