Mentor’s Comments-
• Introduce by explaining volcanism in brief.
• Explain why volcanic eruptions are called agents of destruction.
• Enlist the benefits of the volcanic eruptions.
• Conclude accordingly.
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Mentor’s Comments-
• Introduce by explaining volcanism in brief.
• Explain why volcanic eruptions are called agents of destruction.
• Enlist the benefits of the volcanic eruptions.
• Conclude accordingly.
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It’d be so kind of you if you can review my answer
Akanksha
Good attempt.
Introduction is fine, although causes of formation need not be mentioned, since this is a 10 marker only.
Next part about agents of destruction is fine, some basic points can be added. You can mention about loss of life and property due to volcanoes along with some examples, further global warming due to release of CO2 can be mentioned.
Next part is good, you have covered most of the points, regulation of carbon cycle can be added. In first point, you can talk about sulphur release. In landscapes, you can use some examples for value addition such as Hawaiian Islands.
Conclusion is fine.
Keep practicing. You are writing well. 🙂
Please review
Aayush
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Your attempt is nice. Content and presentation both are fine.
Introduction is good.
In next part, you can mention some examples of volcanic eruptions which caused major destruction. For example, Mount Vesuvius in Italy, when talking about tsunami you can mention Krakatoa eruption in Indonesia.
Positives mentioned are also fine, you can mention volcanoes being a source of geothermal energy. In landscapes, you can also talk about formation of islands such as Hawaiian Islands. Other points are fine.
Conclusion is good.
Keep practicing. 🙂
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Vishwendra
Decent attempt.
Introduction is good.
In next part, you can mention some examples of destructive volcanoes such as Mount Vesuvius in Italy. Some examples of diseases causes due to gases and ash released can be mentioned (asthma, silicosis etc).
Positives mentioned are also okay, some points can be added though. In first point, you can talk about formation of islands too such as Hawaiian Islands. Next, release of water vapour in atmosphere, providing sulphur, balancing carbon cycle etc can be mentioned. Points no. 4 and 5 can be merged.
Conclusion is a bit lengthy, also it is talking about prevention of destruction, however, the question was related to positive aspects, hence a balanced conclusion would be better.
Keep practicing. Check out the model answers from WhatsApp group. 🙂