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Begin by defining inequality and cite statistics to show inequalities in the Indian society.
In the body, first, write about the various reasons for inequality in India- historical reasons, poverty, informal employment, lack of social security, regional imbalances etc. Then, write about the impact of inequality in India. Next, write about the steps that are needed to address this and move towards a more equitable society.
Conclude with a way forward.
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Saurabh
Decent attempt. In introduction, definition is fine. However, you can mention some data on inequality by quoting from various reports like World Inequality Report(India specific findings), report on state of inequality in India(released by EAC-PM) etc. That will add weight to your answer.
Reasons mentioned are good, here you have used data well, gender inequality causes can be elaborated a bit. Steps needed part is also fine, progressive taxation, wealth tax etc can be mentioned additionally. While talking about social security/employment schemes- you can use some examples- you can mention need of employment guarantee scheme for urban poor, strengthening MGNREGA etc
Conclusion is good.
Keep practicing. 🙂
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Naveen
Although structure of your answer is fine, it lacks a bit on data part.
In intro, define inequality in one line and after that mention some data on inequality by quoting from various reports like World Inequality Report(India specific findings), report on state of inequality in India(released by EAC-PM) etc. In this way, you can avoid writing the section on ‘impact of inequality’.
Broadly, reasons mentioned are fine- but try to be a bit more specific- for example, in gender discrimination you can mention lower participation in labour force, very less ownership of farm land etc; in lack of basic facilities again you can mention some data, in regional imbalances you can mention Green revolution. Some other points such as lack of social security and unequal effects of globalisation can also be mentioned.
Steps needed part is fine, progressive taxation, wealth tax etc can be mentioned additionally. Also need of urban employment guarantee schemes, proper implementation of schemes like MGNREGA, BBBP etc can be written about.
Conclusion is fine.
Overall, your knowledge and drift of the answer is fine but content needs to be richer.
Keep practicing. 🙂
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Thanks for the input. I’m a beginner. Will definitely work on the shortcomings.