“Mentor’s Comments”
Introduction – Explain in short about Indian society. What it is and what consists.
Body –
Write about the salient features with examples.
Give arguments for whether they are static or dynamic. It is better to give both side of argument.
Now conclude on what is your point – whether static or not.
Conclusion – brief remark as how salient features of Indian society helping nation building.
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Utkarsha ,
Your Introduction is well articulated. Conclusion is first fine.
Since it is asked in question explicitly so You must write 1-2 lines with examples about each feature.
Question demands you to discuss whether features are static or dynamic. Not society as a whole. So discuss each of the features you have Written.
You have enough content just need to mold it as per the requirement of the Question.
Now coming to your doubt. Logical flow mean parts of the Question must be addressed in a sequence which is logical as per the demand of the Question. For Ex. In 15th June question few students discussed ‘ how Diversity Support development’ first than written about it being a hurdle. Which is not a logical sequence as in a debate you first give an idea than opposes it.
You can identify this simply be reading the question just notice the sequence of the issues raised in the Question. If you are finding it hard than read the Question first, note down the order in which you will address the question than match it with mentor’s comments.
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Vishal,
For better Introduction rather then talking about the specific feature you must talk about society as whole in Introduction.
Write diversity as a feature. Also you must give more space to second aspect of the Question. Just write 1-2 With for each feature.
Before drawing any conclusion also talk about features that remain static for a long time such as diversity, patriarchy, stratification. Then talk about dynamism.
Your conclusion can be written Better.
You have good content, just try to touch upon all the aspects of the Question.
Keep writing:)
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Subhashree,
Your Introduction and Conclusion are very well articulated.
But you have to give more space for second part of the question.
You should have Written features in brief (1-2 lines with example).
You had to discuss static or dynamic nature of there features not society as a whole. So put more focus on that aspect.
Point out static features like Patriarchy, diversity etc. Than use impact of globalisation, assimilation and accommodation, politics etc. to depict dynamism in these features.
You have enough content for the question just molding of the Arguments as per the question is needed.
Read question properly, give equitable space to each section.
Keep practicing for further improvement:)
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Gauri Shankar,
Your Introduction is good.
In main body you have given too much space to the features aspect. Here writing 1-2 lines with example would be enough. Rather give more space to discuss about the nature of these features (not society as a whole).
Indian society is Patriarchy based where matrilineal are exceptions not elements of dynamism. For dynamism you can write due to laws, globalisation etc. Women and women rights are being promoted and this give dynamism to patriarchy.
Features like unity in diversity, Patriarchy, stratification etc remained in society for a long time but due to impacts of Constitution, laws, literacy and globalisation etc there are changing in nature.
Conclusion is written fine.
Read the question carefully and give equitable space to various parts of the question.
Keep practicing for further improvement:)
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Your Introduction is good.
Since it’s asked specifically in the question so you must give proper write-up to features section, write 1-2 lines with examples for each. Diagram is fine but it cannot be a replacement a core part. Also always label your diagram.
In second part you have written well about static nature of the features except Riots which are exceptions not a feature.
In dynamic section you have discussed society as whole rather you should have Written about these features as question talks about features not society. You can use factors written conclusion so point out dynamism in the features.
Read the question carefully.
You have enough content just give equitable space to each part.
Keep practicing for further improvement:)
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Anupam ,
Your Introduction and Conclusion are Good.
In features section add more features try to pick up examples from modern times as well.
You have addressed second aspect correctly but just mentioning them is not enough. Give proper write up, diagrams can not be a replacement for the core write up. Also substantiate this section with examples like you did for the first.
You have enough content but to bring in depth in answer you need to address them properly, formal mentioning will not help you in scoring marks.
Keep writing for further improvement 🙂
3.5/10
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Harshaa,
Your Introduction is good.
You have addressed both part of the question. Features section is written good, though few more points can be added. Also Diversity is a single aspect so you must depict various Diversity under one heading.
In Second before pointing out dynamism, you must mention static features like stratification, Diversity, Patriarchy etc. then talk about changing nature, It will make your discussion wholistic. Use facts, examples for adding weight to your Arguments.
Conclusion is fine.
Overall a fine attempt. Keep it up.
Keep practicing for further improvement:)
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Ankita ,
Your Introduction is fine but it’s lengthy. However you could’ve talked about the evolution of Indian society in Introduction so to avoid repetition of points in features section.
In features section 4 out of 5 points are essentially about one feature i.e. Diversity. Add different points like Traditional, village dominated etc.
Second aspect of the Question is written well. If you can give Examples or facts to support your Arguments. It will add value to your answer.
Conclusion is written fine.
Overall fine Attempt. Keep practicing for further improvement:)
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Rajlaxmi ,
Your Introduction and Conclusion are very well articulated.
You have Covered both the parts of the Question. First part is written well However, you should use points like 1 and 5 in second section of the Question.
In Second section you had to discuss the nature of ‘features’ Written in first part, not of society as a whole. So you must present your Arguments in that direction.
You have fine understanding of the topic just mold your argument as per the demand of the question.
Keep writing for improving further:)
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Deepali ,
You can write better Introduction. Here you can talk about ever evolving nature of Indian society.
In first part just mentioning name is not enough. As it is asked explicitly in the Question. So write 1-2 lines with example about various features.
In Second part, you had to discuss about the features being static or dynamic. Not society as a whole (though dynamism in these features makes Indian society dynamic).
Static features are Written fine except Riots which is not a feature of Indian society rather an evil exception. On the same line you must discuss dynamism in features.
You have good content just molding it as per the requirement of the Question is needed.
conclusion is written fine.
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Aabha,
Your Introduction and Conclusion are Written good.
Despite having understood the Question you couldn’t fulfilled the Demand of the question.
First you should write various features with 1-2 lines explanation with examples.
Then discuss about nature of these features. In dynamic section you have written equality, gender equality. Unfortunately they are not features of Indian society even today.
You must address these sections separately for better presentation. Use facts and examples to support your Arguments.
Try to mold your content as per the Demand of the Question
Address all the parts of the Question equitably.
Keep practicing for Improvement:)
2.5/10
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Vishnu,
Your Introduction and Conclusion are well articulated.
In first part of the answer you have written 4 out of 5 points related to religion. Diversify your points in this section.
In Second section you had to discuss that ‘the features written in first part are static or dynamic in nature, not society as a whole.
There are static features which are present in in society like Patriarchy, stratification, Diversity etc.
But due to effects of Constitution, laws, globalization, economic growth there is dynamism in these features. Use facts, examples to support your Arguments.
You have enough content but you need to mold it as per the Demand of the Question.
Keep practicing for further improvement:)
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Sumita,
Overall you have Written a very good answer.
Introduction can be Written better. Conclusion is well articulated.
Since this is a 10 marks questions you should write it in two pages.
Also you can write factors such as globalization, Constitution, laws, economic growth etc. which are responsible for the dynamism on Indian society.
Good Attempt. Keep it up.
Keep practicing:)
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Shivanshu 3,
Your Introduction and Conclusion are fine but can be Written Better.
In features 5 out of 10 points deals with only one aspect i.e. Diversity it would be better to club them under one header.
In Second section you had to discuss whether these features are static or dynamic.
Like Patriarchy, stratification, Diversity etc are static, but we can see dynamism in other like caste to class, due to globalisation, Constitution, laws, economic growth etc.
But you have discussed society as a whole. In that too you should put emphasis on present day Society historical reference are fine but bring in present day aspects as well.
You have the content but Read question carefully and present Arguments as per the Demand of the Question.
Read others’ answers for better perspective. Keep practicing.
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Arpit3,
It would be better if you talk about evolution of Indian society in Introduction. So to avoid repetition of features in second section.
Question ask you to write features explicitly so you should write 1-2 lines with examples for each. Diagram can not be a replacement for a core part of the Question. Also always label your diagrams.
In Second section you had to discuss static or dynamic nature of the features you have Written in first second, not society as a whole.
Conclusion is fine.
You have enough content just mold your Arguments as per the demand of the Question.
Read question carefully and Keep writing for further improvement 🙂
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Kartikeya,
Your Introduction and Conclusion are fine. Going by the quality of your answer, I Believe you can write better Introduction and Conclusion.
Overall your have Written a good answer. Content wise it is fine. Along with Globalization you can bring in more factors like constitution, laws, economic growth etc which are responsible for this dynamism.
Also you need to separate static and dynamic aspects so it would be better to write both in separate paragraphs.
Rest is fine. Keep it up.
Keep practicing 🙂
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Vivek ,
Your Introduction and Conclusion are fine.
First part is written well. But you have given much space to it. Give equitable space to second part of the Question as well.
In Second part, you have just mentioned name of features, bring in factors like globalization, Constitution, laws, economic growth etc which caused dynamism in these features. Then only you’ll be able to proof elements of dynamism, just mentioning name is not enough.
You have enough content for the topic, but you need to give due space for different aspects up in answer.
Read others’ answer. Keep practicing for further improvement:)