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- In the intro, mention the recently held regional security dialogue on Afghanistan.
- In the body mention the challenge facing India after the return of Taliban in Afghanistan in terms of regional security and hostile China and Pakistan leveraging the situation against India.
- In the suggestions mention need for re-establishing presence in Kabul, engaging Taliban as it seeks alternatives. India will also need to confront China in Afghanistan.
- Also mention that India’s economic interests also demand its presence in Afghanistan.
- Conclude by mentioning that there is no time to lose for this purpose. A heavy and long-term price will have to be paid otherwise. In all this process India must remain grounded in reality.
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Siddharth
Nice attempt. Intro is fine. Keep the next part concise, also mention what are India’s interests in the region(reason why India is hosting regional security forum)- especially the challenges- security challenges, China-Pak axis, not ceding ground to China in the region etc
Next part about significance for Afg is also fine, but it can also be kept concise; more focus should be on India’s challenges, India’s interests and India’s way forward.
Suggestions part is good, mention some past trade figures and need to revive that, also some points can be lifted from the declaration about maintaining security in the region, avoiding radicalization etc
Conclusion is fine.
Keep writing. 🙂
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Nandhini
Introduction is too long, question’s background is about Delhi declaration, so come to the point after 1st line…no need to mention India’s stand on Afghanistan separately, after writing about the Delhi decl, mention its significance for India which you have done in the next part. However, some points are missing. Write about the challenges for example security challenges in the region (terrorism), China-Pak axis, not ceding ground to China in the region.
Other points are fine, you can make it concise.
Suggestions part is good, it will be good if you can pick up 1-2 points from the declaration and write them especially about deradicalization, collective cooperation etc. Points about reducing smuggling is good.
Conclusion is fine.
Keep writing. 🙂
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Muskan
Nice attempt. In intro, one more line about the background of Delhi declaration, participating nations would be good, otherwise comes across as very superficial.
Points in 2nd part about ‘need for India..’ are good, however, regional security dimension is missing..mention that terrorism, regional instability etc can directly impact India’s north-west frontier.
Also, you can give a passing mention to India’s monumental efforts towards stabilizing Aghanistan in pre-Taliban days.
Suggestions are fine, include economic dimension- increasing trade etc. Will be good if you can pick up 1-2 points from the declaration and write them especially about deradicalization, collective cooperation, reducing smuggling etc.
Conclusion is good. Overall, decent answer.
Keep writing. 🙂
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