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-In the intro, mention that the Prohibition of Child Marriage (Amendment) Bill, 2021, fixes 21 years as the marriageable age for women.
-In the body mention various factors such as social and economic responsible for the prevalence. In the next part mention the limits of success that can be achieved by increasing the age. In the next part mention that NHFS-5 data suggests strong link between years of schooling with the desired outcomes and need to focus on it.
-Conclude by mentioning the need to focus on factors such as education which can help in reducing the prevalence of child marriage in India.
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You should have also mentioned some problems with increasing the age of marriage.
Uttara
Decent attempt but you could include more content. This is a 15 marker, so 2.5-3 pages should be written.
Introduction is fine.
Factors mentioned are fine, in social factors you have mentioned inability to do physical work.. mention that it is a wrong perception otherwise it seems like a sweeping statement from your side.. Also include the link between illiteracy and early marriage(you can use NFHS data here- 27% of illiterate women married before 18 years).
Points in favour of amendment are fine ( constitutional mandate of equality will be met can be mentioned), however, you can mention some issues too- legal measures not enough, unlikely to help financially dependent women, scope of abuse by parents etc.
Then, mention a way forward including some other steps- improvement in health, education, social norms.
Then conclude.
When you are asked an opinion, you should try to look into both sides of the argument and then take a stand if required.
Keep practicing. 🙂
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Deepti
Good attempt, your answer is content rich.
You can mention about the amendment in intro itself. NFHS data can be linked with your points. For example, illiteracy and it’s link with early marriage can be mentioned in the point on education that you have written.
Factors mentioned are good, as mentioned above can be substantiated with data.
Benefits of the legal measure are also fine.
However, after that write a section on why only legal measure is not enough(here again you can link with NFHS data that you have mentioned in intro-inspite of law marriages have been happening for below 18 girls too), plus you can mention that law is unlikely to help financially dependent women, can be abused by parents in their favour etc.
When you are asked an opinion, you should try to look into both sides of the argument and then take a stand if required.
Next, you can mention the way forward that you have written. Also try to invariably write a concluding statement, makes the presentation better.
Keep practicing. 🙂
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You have written well, especially coherence in the answer is good.. Every part is linked well. However, content is a bit less for a 15 marker. You could include some benefits (2-3 points) of increasing the marriage age, before mentioning that it is not enough.
Both sides of the argument should be presented before coming to conclusion. You could mention things like it will allow women to get higher education, allow them to participate in labour force etc.
Introduction and conclusion are fine. However, introduction can be shortened a bit.. In conclusion you can mention some government schemes in this regard and the nedd for better implementation.
Other parts of the answer are fine.
Keep practicing. 🙂
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Anshuman
Good attempt. Both content and structure of the answer are fine.
Introduction is good, but here only you can talk about the recent amendment, that will give a context to the rest of the answer.
Factors mentioned are good, however you can use more data to substantiate your points, relation between illiteracy and child marriage from NFHS(27% of illiterate women married before 18 years) can be utilised. This will leave better impact.
Points in favour and against the amendment are good. In benefits first point, you can mention Article 14.
Conclusion is fine.
Keep practicing. 🙂
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Pranav
Decent attempt.
Introduction is good.
Factors are also fine, here also you can use NFHS data for example, link illiteracy and early marriages in point no. 1. Point no. 4 seems to be factually incorrect. As per the data presented by the Ministry of Agriculture to Lok Sabha, there is 55.4 per cent men and 75.7 per cent women workforce in agriculture in rural areas in 2019-20.
In next part, in advantages you can mention article 14 of the constitution, plus you can say it will allow for skill development, vocational training etc
Disadvantages are fine, mention after that legal measure is not enough as can be seen from marriages happening below 18 inspite of law.
Way forward is fine.
Keep practicing. 🙂
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