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- https://www.thehindu.com/
opinion/op-ed/alarming-hunger- or-statistical-artefact/ article37045072.ece - In the intro, mention the decline in India ranking in the GHI to 101 place for this year.
- In the methodology used for the index mention its four components and the data source used for it. In the issues mention its focus on calory intake and its children oriented nature. In the issue of wasting and stunting explain the connection between the two and how tackling wasting could help deal with stunting.
- Conclude by mentioning India’s relative success in reducing child mortality due to the health facilities it provided.
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Bh Rpalli,
First part of your answer is very good, intro is fine, methodology and issues are also nicely written. In way forward, try to make more specific suggestions to avoid making points look very generic (like food fortification to reduce hidden hunger, more nutritious meals like including pulses and eggs in mid-day meals, improving budgetary allocation etc). Also, you can relate wasting and stunting and mention that reducing wasting will also reduce stunting.
Conclusion is fine, you can mention about zero hunger SDG.
Keep writing. 🙂
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Arpita
Nice attempt. Introduction is good, components are also mentioned, also mention the data sources used for the index. In issues, too many points have been devoted for mentioning about calorie intake, try to make a bit more concise and include more points. You can mention that there is no acknowledgement of the recent government schemes launched(can mention some schemes in brief as well) pre and post pandemic for solving the issue.
In way forward, points are fine..some more like food fortification, diversifying mid-day meals, WASH facilities etc can be mentioned. Conclusion is good.
Keep practicing. 🙂
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Siddharth
Decent attempt. Introduction is fine, in methodology you have missed some of the data sources, try to mention them. In issues, points are fine – however you can mention things like excessive focus on children, no acknowledgment of recent government schemes(name some of them too), calorie intake varies across regions etc
Way forward is fine, try relating stunting and wasting- reducing wasting will also result in reducing stunting. Conclusion is good.
Also, try to work a bit on your handwriting. Some words become very hard to read..try giving space between letters.
Keep writing. 🙂
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Ashok
You have more or less skipped the first part of the question, also ranking is 101/116; avoid these errors. Also mention what are the components of GHI, how it is measured, what are the data sources etc. Then also mention issues with the index(excessive focus on children, no acknowledgment of recent government schemes, calorie intake varies across regions etc, India’s position etc).
Reasons of stunting and wasting is not being asked, no need to mention them.
Steps to tackle part is fine, conclusion is also okay.
Read the question multiple times and try to stick to what is being asked.
Keep practicing. 🙂
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Nandhini,
Nice attempt. Introduction is good, methodology of index and issues part is also good. In issues, you can mention some of the schemes government has initiated in recent times for malnutrition, however according to the report there has been no success.
Tackling child wasting and stunting part is also fine, you can also relate stunting and wasting and mention that reducing wasting will reduce stunting too.
Conclusion is fine, you can include some SDGs etc to give it a bit more weight.
Keep practicing. 🙂
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Muskan,
Nice attempt. Introduction is good, explanation of hunger index and its methodology is also fine. In issues, you can mention some of the schemes government has initiated in recent times for malnutrition, however according to the report there has been no success. Point about data is okay, you can say it was based on Gallup poll rather than actual measurements.
Way forward is fine, try to relate wasting and stunting and mention that reducing wasting will also reduce stunting. Rest of the points are fine, conclusion is good.
Keep practicing. 🙂
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