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- https://www.thehindu.com/
opinion/op-ed/weighing-in-on- a-health-data-retention-plan/ article38389337.ece - In the intro, mention the consultative process on the health data retention by NHA.
- In the body mention advantages such as portability of health data, research and innovation by availability of data etc.
- In the suggestions mention, use based classification, anonymizing data, express and informed consent etc.
- Conclude by mentioning the need addressing the privacy concerns associated with health data retention policy.
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Karun
Decent attempt.
Intro can be about the consultation process started by NHA on data retention, the intro you have mentioned can be written as one of the benefits.
You have written both advantages and concerns in same subsection. You can write a seperate subsection on concerns mentioning privacy issues, informed consent difficult to apply in India, lack of healthcare access forcing citizens to consent etc
Benefits and suggestions part are fine.You have mentioned good points.
Conclusion is okay.
Keep practicing. 🙂
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Siddharth
Decent attempt. Structure of your answer is good.
Intro is fine, however NHA has started only consultation.
Advantages mentioned are also good.
You can also talk about the need of data for research and innovation purposes.
In concerns mention about impingement on privacy(Ar 21), also Sc directive to abide by the four-part test may be violated, one-size fits all approach might not be useful.
Other points are fine.
Suggestions are also good, need to make a use-based classification for collecting data, transparent process for retaining data can be mentioned.
Conclusion is fine.
Keep practicing. 🙂
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Likhitha
Nice attempt. You have written well. Both content and presentation are fine.
Intro is good, benefits listed are also fine.
In concerns, issue of privacy has been mentioned. Further you can talk about
informed consent being difficult to apply in India, lack of healthcare access forcing citizens to consent, one size fits all approach might not be suitable etc
In way forward, the need to make a use-based classification for collecting data and having a transparent process for retaining data can be mentioned.
Other points are fine too, conclusion is good.
Keep practicing. 🙂