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- https://indianexpress.com/article/explained/explained-global/us-pakistan-f-16-package-8153865/
- https://indianexpress.com/article/world/united-states-pakistan-relationship-india-jaishankar-comment-f16-8174908/
- In the introduction, talk about the package and a bit of its background.
- In the body, first, mention the implications of the deal. Next, highlight India’s concerns with the deal. Next, mention the justification given by US.
- Conclude by talking about a tit-for-tat approach to India’s “strategic autonomy” argument.
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Sakshi
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Attempt is decent.
Introduction is good.
Concerns for India are also well written, further this will increase conventional deterrence of Pakistan which can be mentioned. You can give example of the recent Indo-Pak skirmish after Balakot strikes where Pakistan had used F-16.
In US justification, points are fine- arguments given by US such as it will support the foreign policy and national security objectives of the US and its counterterrorism efforts can also be mentioned.
Further, from an observer’s point of view you can also mention, US might be giving an indication to India due to India’s “lukewarm” attitude to the sanctions against Russia. Similarly, US also might be trying to break China’s hold on Pakistan with sweeteners of its own.
Conclusion is fine.
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Shubham
Try to present different aspects in the answer and then come to a conclusion.
In introduction, first line is fine. Also, mention some features of the package- technical and logistics services, aircraft and engine hardware and software modifications and support, equipment support etc. Criticism from India’s side is also fine.
Concerns mentioned are okay, you can give example of the recent Indo-Pak skirmish after Balakot strikes where Pakistan had used F-16.
Next, mention a separate sub-section on America’s justification for the deal- counter terrorism is fine, you could also mention that the sale does not include any new capabilities, weapons, or munitions and will not alter the basic military balance in the region; US has argued that it will support the foreign policy and national security objectives of the US.
Also, avoid making blanket statements like ‘it will damage our relationship with USA’ because countries can have different stances on a particular issue and still cooperate.
In conclusion you can give balanced opinion that is, since India is demonstrating “strategic autonomy” to engage with every side, (Quad, SCO etc); it may have to come to terms when others in the world play the same game.
Overall, content can be presented better with additional points, crux of the content is fine but elaboration is required.
Keep practicing. 🙂
2.5/10
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Alankrit
Decent attempt.
Introduction is fine, although you could mention the amount $450mn, and some features of the package- technical and logistics services, aircraft and engine hardware and software modifications and support, equipment support etc. One line can also be mentioned about public disapproval of the deal by India.
Concerns mentioned are good. ‘Enhanced conventional deterrence’ can be mentioned in the 3rd point.
In next part, both dimensions should be mentioned before coming to a conclusion. You have mentioned the criticism, that’s good, the justification given by US can also be mentioned-
sale does not include any new capabilities, weapons, or munitions and will not alter the basic military balance in the region;
will support the foreign policy and national security objectives of the US;
counterterrorism efforts;
moral obligation etc
Next, in conclusion you can give balanced opinion that is, since India is demonstrating “strategic autonomy” to engage with every side, (Quad, SCO etc) it may have to come to terms when others in the world play the same game.
Keep practicing. 🙂
4.5/10