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- https://www.thehindu.com/
opinion/op-ed/a-reductionist- approach-to-tackling- population-health/ article65077544.ece - In the intro, mention the increasing prevalence of NCDs in India.
- In the body, mention issues in policies such as lack of population-level intervention, individualistic policy measures etc.
- In the suggestions mention need for a total galvanisation of different departments and sectors to the importance of population health, the push for digitisation etc.
- Conclude by mentioning the need for moving away from the predominantly biomedical paradigm of health.
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Karun
Introduction is good, you can add some examples of NCDs .
Issues are also fine, lack of screening and early detection in individuals and communities can be mentioned, lack of followup,outsourcing tertiary care to private sector can be mentioned.
Other points are good, backed up by data.
In suggestions, mention can be made of increasing health budget to 8% of GDP, universal healthcare, reducing dependence on private profit-based institutions,PMSSY etc can be mentioned. Points are fine, although you can divide that section in two parts- Steps taken and way forward, to improve the presentation.
Keep practicing, decent attempt. 🙂
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Likhitha
Introduction is good, some examples can be added.
In next part, try identifying more issues with Indian government’s approach towards NCDs rather than mentioning overall causes.
Low budgetary spending should come up higher, outsourcing tertiary care to for-profit organizations, lack of individual and community screening facilities at an early stage, lack of follow up etc can be mentioned.
Social factors like geographical spread, demographic etc can be kept concise.
Govt efforts mentioned are fine, some recent initiatives like Swasthya suraksha yojana, jan aushadi kedndras can be written too.
Suggestions part is fine.
Try to give a conclusion.
Keep practicing. 🙂
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