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- https://indianexpress.com/
article/opinion/columns/ aadhaar-electoral-reform-bill- marginalised-7686036/ - In the intro, mention the issue of fraudulent voting.
- In the body, mention the objective of curbing electoral frauds and making it easy for migrants to exercise the right to vote. In the concerns mention that Aadhar is not the proof of nationality, it is also not the address proof, lack of audit report about the efficacy of Aadhar duplication, ECI has no control over UIDAI etc.
- Conclude by mentioning the need to address these concerns.
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Karan
Introduction is good. Objectives mentioned are also fine.
In concerns, you have mentioned some good points. Some points can be added such as Aadhar is not a proof of address, different process for enrolment in both Aadhar and voter ID, risk of exclusion, doubts related to Aadhar database etc
In solutions, you can mention some innovative ways such as use of cryptography. Other points mentioned are also okay.
Mentioning political statements can be avoided. Issue can be mentioned directly.
Keep practicing. 🙂
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Nandhini
Introduction is fine, objectives part is also good.
Other provisions can be written in a more concise manner, concerns should be elaborated, mention about Aadhar being neither a proof of citizenship nor address, different process for enrolment in both Aadhar and voter ID, risk of exclusion, doubts related to Aadhar database etc
Other points are good.
Way forward is good, technological innovations such as cryptography can also be mentioned.
Conclusion is fine.
Keep writing, address what is asked more comprehensively. 🙂
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Muskan
Introduction and objectives are fine.
Concerns regarding the provisions are also well written.
Aadhar not a proof of address, different process for enrolment in both Aadhar and voter ID, risk of exclusion, doubts over authenticity of Aadhar data base can also be mentioned.
Mention a brief way forward and then conclude. You can mention points like use of cryptography, passing of privacy law etc
Conclusion is fine.
Keep practicing. 🙂