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article/opinion/columns/g-7- virtual-meet-united-kingdom- india-and-the-west-relations- 7348541/ - In the intro, mention the deterioration of relations with China and India’s growing tilt towards the West.
- In the body, mention how changing geopolitical circumstances such as the rise of China and the perceived US decline offers India an opportunity to expand partnership which include a strong bilateral strategic cooperation with the US, France, UK as well as the Quad and the trilateral partnerships with France and Australia as well as Japan and Australia. India has also stepped up its engagement with the European Union. Also mention how India faces hurdles from China in its global ambitions.
- Conclude by mentioning that productive partnership with the West helps secure a growing array of India’s national interests and adds a new depth to India’s international relations
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Sanvi
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Now coming to the answer, I don’t think you understood the question properly- it is not just about India’s tilt to west, it talks about the emergence of a MORE BROAD global democratic coalition covering many countries other than the west. Mention why has this happened- China factor is one of the reasons, you have explained that but kept on repeating, some other factors are- global financial crisis, pandemic, security concerns in places like Indo-pacific, perceived decline of America etc
Next you have written the examples like Quad etc. That is good.
After that, write about more issues on which India can increase cooperation- Cooperation and reforming the global economic order, pushing for permanent membership in UNSC,NSG, mitigating climate change, promoting greener growth, cooperation in initiatives like ISA and CDRI making the world immune to future pandemics, and constructing trusted supply chains etc
This part you have missed.
You are writing well but don’t just limit yourself to the article mentioned in the question. Try to explore other dimensions also.
Keep writing. 🙂
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Utkarsha
You have attempted well but I think you need to understand the core demands of the question and structure your answer accordingly.
In first part you need to justify the statement given that a democratic coalition covering many countries other than the west is emerging in recent years. Mention why has this happened. Reasons could be- global financial crisis, rise of China, pandemic, security concerns in places like Indo-pacific, perceived decline of America etc Then give examples which you have given like Quad, JAI, trilateral partnerships etc. Brexit and NAFTA are not very relevant, so you can avoid them.
In the 2nd part mention how has these partnerships helped India, India can now partner these countries — on reforming the global economic order, mitigating climate change, promoting greener growth, making the world immune to future pandemics, and constructing trusted supply chains etc
Next in 1-2 points write how this has become the new normal due to rising China(here you can put India-China issues). Keep this part brief.
Finally conclude by saying we need to increase our partnerships based on 3Cs with other countries keeping in mind our national interests.
Don’t write everything you know, try to understand what exactly the question is asking, in IR you will always have points, so that is not much of a worry.
You have made a decent attempt. Keep writing. 🙂
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Anupam
I think you didn’t understand the question properly, it is saying that democratic coalition has become MORE BROAD than just west, that is it now includes other countries like nations from ASEAN, South Africa, South Korea, Japan, Australia etc You have just written about west.
You need to give reasons why this democratic coalition is increasing.Reasons could be- global financial crisis, rise of China, pandemic, security concerns in places like Indo-pacific, perceived decline of America etc Then give examples like Quad, JAI, trilateral partnerships etc.
In the 2nd part you have to write how this increasing coalition has helped India. We can now co-operate on more global topics such as reforming the global economic order, mitigating climate change, promoting greener growth, making the world immune to future pandemics, and constructing trusted supply chains etc
Next very briefly write how this has been boosted by hostile Indo-China relations and then conclude.
In such questions read the questions very carefully, break it into parts, identify what is the question asking in each part by underlining keyword, then proceed to write accordingly. Otherwise, you will give a very broad generic answer which is not sufficient.
You have made a good attempt, just keep writing, we’ll improve. 🙂
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Kartikey
You have understood the question well, in 1st part give examples of such global democratic partnerships like Quad, JAI, other trilaterals involving India to substantiate your point. Reasons are good, but I think you should write from the perspective of India rather than west, in that case you can add points like global financial crisis, perceived failure of US, pandemic etc also as reasons for increasing global democratic coalitions.
Second part is good, you can mention briefly that how these partnerships involving India have been bolstered by hostility in Indo-China relations.
Rest of the points are good. Conclusion is also fine. Keep practicing. 🙂
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Sana
You have attempted well, your language and writing skills are good.
In the 1st part mention some reasons behind this increasing clamour for global democratic coalitions- global financial crisis, rise of China, pandemic, security concerns in places like Indo-pacific, perceived decline of America etc
In the 2nd part, you have explained each part in detail, for 10 marker no need to write that much- just mention how has joining such partnerships helped India in 1 line(last part of each of your points). Further, you can add more dimensions on which India can now co-operate such as reforming the global economic order, mitigating climate change, promoting greener growth, making the world immune to future pandemics, and constructing trusted supply chains etc
Next very briefly write how this has been boosted by hostile Indo-China relations and then conclude.
Overall, your attempt is good, you need to make it crisp and include more dimensions, it will improve the answer further.
3.5/10. Keep writing. 🙂
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Harshaa
Your answer is very China-centric. Mention some other reasons behind this increasing clamour for global democratic coalitions too- global financial crisis, pandemic, security concerns in places like Indo-pacific, perceived decline of America etc. Also give some examples of various democratic coalitions which are emerging.
In the 2nd part write in some detail, you have written very brief answer. You can add more dimensions on which India can now co-operate such as reforming the global economic order, mitigating climate change, promoting greener growth, making the world immune to future pandemics,constructing trusted supply chains etc Try to bring multiple dimensions to the answer.
Also, I don’t think you are writing 150 words. You can increase your content. Write at least 1-1.5 page. Keep practicing. 🙂
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Arpit
Mention some other reasons behind this increasing clamour for global democratic coalitions too- global financial crisis, pandemic etc. Also give some examples of various democratic coalitions which are emerging especially India specific.
In the 2nd part, you can add more dimensions on which India can now co-operate such as reforming the global economic order, mitigating climate change, promoting greener growth, making the world immune to future pandemics, and constructing trusted supply chains etc
You have repeated two- three times about China, once is enough. Further you can give some reasons why India’s hostility with China has increased.
Rest of the points are good. Keep writing. 🙂
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Ankita
Mention reasons other than China also in the first part. You can write about global financial crisis, pandemic, security concerns in places like Indo-pacific, perceived decline of America etc. You have given examples of various democratic coalitions rising in recent times, that is good but keep it short.
In the 2nd part mention how has these increasing partnerships help India, India can now partner these countries — on reforming the global economic order, mitigating climate change, promoting greener growth, making the world immune to future pandemics, and constructing trusted supply chains etc
Please note that the question is saying that a global democratic coalition is emerging MORE BROAD
LY than just the western countries, so don’t make the answer exclusively about west. In 2nd part you can write about how this broad coalition helps in our western interactions also.
You have written well, facts are there but some analysis part is missing.
Read some other answers. Keep writing. 🙂
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Dr House
Your answer is good, most importantly you have understood the question well and answered accordingly. In the first part about democratic coalitions, give some examples to substantiate your point. Example- Quad, JAI trilateral etc
Also, reasons for this shift you have mentioned are good, include geopolitical angle also that is rise of China, assertive Russia, emerging trade wars etc
You can include the hostility between India and China too as one of the reasons why it is necessary for us.
Rest of the points are good. In the 2nd part you can also include environment and climate change as it is one of the important issues on which multilateral cooperation is needed.
Nice attempt. Keep writing. 🙂
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Rohan
I think you have attempted well but your answer is skewed towards Indo-China relations.
Talk more about India’s emerging partnerships with other democratic countries and what opportunities do they offer. Give more examples, like FTA with such countries, India-EU cooperation etc
Opportunities-Cooperation n reforming the global economic order, mitigating climate change, promoting greener growth, making the world immune to future pandemics, and constructing trusted supply chains etc
Also no need to mention BRICS and RIC here, they are important in their own domain, both give India and China a platform to cooperate and leaders do take part in their summits, so you can’t say totally ineffective.
In reasons other than China you can write about global financial crisis, pandemic, security concerns in places like Indo-pacific, perceived decline of America etc.
You are writing well. Just include multiple dimensions in the answer. Keep writing. 🙂
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Shivanshu
No one is asking about USA or UK’s perspective. So no need to write about them. You started well. Continue by giving examples of democratic coalitions especially those including India and then write about the opportunities these coalitions provide to India.
Examples are good.
Also write about what other opportunities these coalitions provide other than China, surely our foreign policy can’t be based only on China.
You can write about these-Cooperation and reforming the global economic order, pushing for permanent membership in UNSC,NSG, mitigating climate change, promoting greener growth, making the world immune to future pandemics, and constructing trusted supply chains etc
You are writing well. Just include multiple dimensions in the answer. Keep writing. 🙂
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Shikhar
Mention some other reasons(except China) also about why idea of democratic coalition has gained ground- global financial crisis, pandemic, security concerns in places like Indo-pacific, perceived decline of America, withdrawal of USA from various international organisations in the Trump era etc.
Also you have made just a passing mention of China, you can write 1-2 lines because the democratic coalition rise is somewhat propelled by China’s rise- aggressiveness in South China Sea, trade wars etc
Second part about opportunities is good. You have covered most of the points. Conclusion is good too.
Read some other answers. Keep writing. 🙂
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Sumita
First part of the answer is good. Mention the examples just after that in short. In second part, you have to write about the issues and not names of coalitions.
You can write about these-Cooperation and reforming the global economic order, pushing for permanent membership in UNSC,NSG, mitigating climate change, promoting greener growth, cooperation in initiatives like ISA and CDRI making the world immune to future pandemics, and constructing trusted supply chains etc
Rest of the answer is good, just need to mention growing opportunities in a bit detail as the 2nd part of the question is entirely about that.
Conclusion is good.
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Murari
Nowhere in the question China is mentioned, so don’t make it a bash China answer. You can mention about China in 1 point explaining its misdoings and giving it as a reason for the rise of democratic coalitions.
Then write other factors also such as – global financial crisis, pandemic, security concerns in places like Indo-pacific, perceived decline of America, withdrawal of USA from various international organisations in the Trump era etc. You have mentioned points about USA , that is good.
Then give some examples of such coalitions- Quad, JAI trilateral, India- EU partnership, D10 etc This par also you have mentioned , good. Also no need to mention BRICS and RIC here, they are important in their own domain, both give India and China a platform to cooperate and leaders do take part in their summits.
Next you mention the opportunities these coalitions provide to India, mention some issues-Cooperation and reforming the global economic order, pushing for permanent membership in UNSC,NSG, mitigating climate change, promoting greener growth, cooperation in initiatives like ISA and CDRI making the world immune to future pandemics, and constructing trusted supply chains etc
This part you have missed, important to write.
You know the facts but I think you need to work on organically moving from one part of the question to other.
Keep writing. 🙂
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Vivek
Russia is not very interested in being a part of global democratic coalitions, so avoid naming it. You can add some ASEAN countries. Also give examples of such coalitions such as Quad, Japan India Australia trilateral, D10 etc
Also you need to add more dimensions to your answer especially in the 2nd part where you need to write about the increasing opportunities for India- Cooperation and reforming the global economic order, pushing for permanent membership in UNSC,NSG, mitigating climate change, promoting greener growth, cooperation in initiatives like ISA and CDRI, making the world immune to future pandemics, and constructing trusted supply chains etc
The last two points you have mentioned, that is good, instead of writing in detail about one point it is better to include multiple points in such answers.
In the conclusion try to end on a positive note. You can mention about cooperating in IPR and subsidies in opportunities only.
Read some other answers. Keep writing. 🙂
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Vishnu
I think content is lacking in this answer. In each of the parts you can add some points to make the answer multi dimensional.
Write some factors for emerging democratic coalitions such as – global financial crisis, pandemic, rise of China(you can mention Indo-China hostility here), security concerns in places like Indo-pacific, perceived decline of America, withdrawal of USA from various international organisations in the Trump era etc. You have mentioned points about building back better, that is good.
Next give some more examples- Quad, trilaterals involving India etc
Increasing opportunities for India- Cooperation and reforming the global economic order, mitigating climate change, promoting greener growth, cooperation in initiatives like ISA and CDRI, making the world immune to future pandemics, and constructing trusted supply chains etc
You will have to mention issues, just mentioning ‘high level discussion forum’ won’t work.
Take help from the article above if you are short in content. Keep writing. 🙂