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- https://indianexpress.com/
article/opinion/columns/g-7- nations-meet-statement-on- open-societies-climate-change- india-7359182/ - In the intro, mention the context of India’s participation in the G-7 summit.
- In the body, mention India long engagement with the West and especially with the U.S. in the past. In the next part mention the changing global circumstances like the emergence of China and its aggressive stance, challenges it poses to India and the world in Indo-Pacific, supply chain issues, challenges mounted against the democratic values etc. Next, explain how these challenges make India a natural ally of the West.
- Conclude by mentioning the need for sustained consultations between India and its Western partners on a range of new challenges.
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Gauri Shankar
You have written well, however you can structure the answer better.
Introduction is good, then give some past examples of binding with the West on basis of democratic values (Vajpayee government joined President Bill Clinton’s initiative on building a global community of democracies. Manmohan Singh joined the Bush Administration in promoting a global Democracy Fund at the UN)
Then, mention the reasons why the partnership is more critical now, you have mentioned them,that is good.
Next write some new challenges(point 4 that you have written+ need for renewal and reform of democratic institutions in both the US and India) common to both India and the west.
Conclusion is good.
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Anupam
You have written some key points but missed some too.
In the introduction mention about the ‘open societies’ joint statement of India with G7. Then give some past examples of binding with the West on basis of democratic values (Vajpayee government joined President Bill Clinton’s initiative on building a global community of democracies. Manmohan Singh joined the Bush Administration in promoting a global Democracy Fund at the UN)
You can mention points like diaspora, rights in short and then move to explain why the partnership is more important now- China factor you have mentioned, then write some more new reasons like mitigating climate change ,management of the Covid-19 pandemic, building supply chains etc
Next mention some challenges in the partnership:
renewal and reform of democratic institutions is urgent in both the US and India. challenges presented by digital technologies, including radicalisation, disinformation, electoral interference, cyber attacks and the role of large social media companies etc
Finally conclude.
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Anuraag
I don’t think talking about Indo-Russia ties is of much importance here, you can avoid.
Examples of India’s engagement with west over democratic values should be given (Vajpayee government joined President Bill Clinton’s initiative on building a global community of democracies. Manmohan Singh joined the Bush Administration in promoting a global Democracy Fund at the UN)
Then talk about reasons of growing partnership with west ( you have written about China, Covid, climate change, these are good)
Then mention some challenges- renewal and reform of democratic institutions is urgent in both the US and India; challenges presented by digital technologies, including radicalisation, disinformation, electoral interference, cyber attacks and the role of large social media companies etc
Finally conclude.
You have the content, you just need to structure the answer better. Russia is not a part of G7 so you can avoid.
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Ibrahim
You have made a nice attempt but the answer is very generic, for example don’t just talk about India being very important, give some reasons. Also write from a broader perspective of India-West partnership not just India-US.
Give some past examples of binding with the West on basis of democratic values (Vajpayee government joined President Bill Clinton’s initiative on building a global community of democracies. Manmohan Singh joined the Bush Administration in promoting a global Democracy Fund at the UN)
Reasons for partnership you have mentioned are okay, you can add climate change,tackling Covid, building supply chains etc
Next mention some challenges in the partnership:
renewal and reform of democratic institutions is urgent in both the US and India. challenges presented by digital technologies, including radicalisation, disinformation, electoral interference, cyber attacks and the role of large social media companies etc
Finally conclude.
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Pulkit
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You have written some key points but missed some too.
In the introduction no need to write about G7 so much, make it India-centric. Mention about the ‘open societies’ joint statement of India. Then give some past examples of binding with the West on basis of democratic values (Vajpayee government joined President Bill Clinton’s initiative on building a global community of democracies. Manmohan Singh joined the Bush Administration in promoting a global Democracy Fund at the UN)
Reasons you have given are good. You can add the need to build global supply chains, other challenges could be renewal and reform of democratic institutions is urgent in both the US and India; challenges presented by digital technologies, including radicalisation, disinformation, electoral interference, cyber attacks etc
Conclusion is good.
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Utkarsha
You have started well, intro is good. But you have restricted the answer to China, China is not the only reason why India and west should co-operate, write about China in 1-2 points but also include other reasons.
Some of them could be : climate change, tackling the pandemic, building global supply chains etc Some more recent challenges you should include : renewal and reform of democratic institutions is urgent in both the US and India; challenges presented by digital technologies, including radicalisation, disinformation, electoral interference, cyber attacks and the role of large social media companies etc
Understand that the question is broadly asking why partnership between India and west is important in today’s time; so you should try to include multiple dimensions (China is one)
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Ankita
I think you did not understand the core demand of the question; it is not about why is China a threat for US and what should it do to counter. Write from India’s perspective not US.
Understand that the question is broadly asking why partnership between India and west is important in today’s time; so you should try to include multiple reasons and challenges for that; China is one of the reasons.
Some of them could be : climate change, tackling the pandemic, building global supply chains etc Some more recent challenges you should include : renewal and reform of democratic institutions is urgent in both the US and India; challenges presented by digital technologies, including radicalisation, disinformation, electoral interference, cyber attacks and the role of large social media companies etc
Also, in intro part give some past examples of binding with the West on basis of democratic values (Vajpayee government joined President Bill Clinton’s initiative on building a global community of democracies. Manmohan Singh joined the Bush Administration in promoting a global Democracy Fund at the UN).
Read such questions multiple times to understand what it is asking as there is no issue of content in such questions.
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Kartikey
You have written well. You can give some concrete examples of binding with the West on basis of democratic values (Vajpayee government joined President Bill Clinton’s initiative on building a global community of democracies. Manmohan Singh joined the Bush Administration in promoting a global Democracy Fund at the UN); Israel, Japan won’t qualify as west, LPG example is good.
Reasons mentioned are good. You can link the worsening of US-China relationship and Indo-China relationship, which brings India-US closer.
In emerging challenges you can include : renewal and reform of democratic institutions is urgent in both the US and India; electoral interference, and the role of large social media companies etc
Nice attempt. Keep writing. 🙂
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Sumita
Introduction and first part of the answer is good. After that the answer has become China-centric. China is one of the reasons for growing partnership between India and west.
Include some other dimensions also. Combine all points w.r.t China and write in one place.
Some more reasons and challenges could be climate change, tackling the pandemic, building global supply chains etc Some more recent challenges you should include : renewal and reform of democratic institutions is urgent in both the US and India; challenges presented by digital technologies, including radicalisation, disinformation, electoral interference, cyber attacks and the role of large social media companies etc
Points are good, organize the answer properly : intro, examples of Indo-west partnership, reasons, challenges,conclusion.
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Murari,
Your answer is good but it will be better if you write in pointwise format. Some dimensions are overlooked otherwise.
Examples of previous partnership and introduction is good.
Some more reasons could be climate change, tackling the pandemic, building global supply chains etc(you can write these in the body of the answer instead of conclusion)
Some recent challenges in the Indo-west partnership you should include : renewal and reform of democratic institutions; challenges presented by digital technologies, including radicalisation, disinformation, electoral interference, cyber attacks and the role of large social media companies etc
Keep points regarding China crisp and brief otherwise it occupies the whole answer.
Nice attempt, keep writing. 🙂
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Arpit
Nice answer. Introduction is good.
Try to include some examples of past partnerships with the west on basis of democratic values (Vajpayee government joined President Bill Clinton’s initiative on building a global community of democracies. Manmohan Singh joined the Bush Administration in promoting a global Democracy Fund at the UN).
Reasons mentioned are good, you can link the worsening relation between Indo-China and China-US. Also include climate change, that will give a different dimension.
Some recent challenges in the Indo-west partnership you should include : renewal and reform of democratic institutions; challenges presented by digital technologies, including radicalisation, disinformation, electoral interference, cyber attacks and the role of large social media companies etc
Conclusion is good.
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Deepali
Nice attempt.
Try to include some examples of past partnerships with the west on basis of democratic values (Vajpayee government joined President Bill Clinton’s initiative on building a global community of democracies. Manmohan Singh joined the Bush Administration in promoting a global Democracy Fund at the UN).
Reasons mentioned are good, you can link the worsening relation between Indo-China and China-US. China-US: trade war, bickering over origin of pandemic, Indo- US: border aggression, Indo-pacific interference of China– these happened at the same time, which moved India towards west, also you can include both India and West not totally comfortable with China’s BRI, debt-trap diplomacy etc
Rest of the points are good.
Conclusion is okay, you can frame it better : the need for sustained consultations between India and its Western partners on a range of new challenges.
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Shivanshu
Your attempt is nice but don’t make it totally about China, restrict it to 1-2 points.
In the beginning, try to include some examples of past partnerships with the west on basis of democratic values (Vajpayee government joined President Bill Clinton’s initiative on building a global community of democracies. Manmohan Singh joined the Bush Administration in promoting a global Democracy Fund at the UN).
Some more reasons of growing partnership could be climate change, tackling the pandemic, building global supply chains etc. Points related to China are good but keep it brief.
Some recent challenges in the Indo-west partnership you should include : renewal and reform of democratic institutions; challenges presented by digital technologies, including radicalisation, disinformation, electoral interference, cyber attacks and the role of large social media companies etc
Also in conlusion mention the overall need for sustained consultations between India and its Western partners on a range of new challenges rather than just reducing it to an anti-China coalition.
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Prashant
You need to structure the answer the better, content is good.
Introduction part is too long, mention some past democratic partnerships with west only and move on. No need to mention differences or partnership with Japan, ASEAN etc
Reasons are good, you can use pointwise format for better visibility.
Some recent challenges in the Indo-west partnership you should include : renewal and reform of democratic institutions; challenges presented by digital technologies, including radicalisation, disinformation, electoral interference, cyber attacks and the role of large social media companies etc
Also write a conclusion, otherwise the answer looks incomplete.
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