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- https://indianexpress.com/
article/opinion/columns/ anganwadis-early-childhood- care-education-7746519/ - In the intro, mention the importance of early education.
- In the body, mention the role anganwadis can play in ECCE by making several changes such as removing the non-ICDS work, training, budgetary allocation etc.
- Conclude by mentioning that nearly 1.4 million anganwadis of the Integrated Child Development Services (ICDS) across India must provide ECCE for the millions of young children in low-income households.
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Arifa
Introduction is fine, ‘pressure’ is not the right word in the first line, you can use ’emphasis’ in its place. Additionally, you can mention a data point that NFHS-5 finds only 13.6% of children enrolled in pre-primary schools.
After that mention some present challenges ( need to substantiate why anganwadis are weakest link)..you can mention brief points like- ignores infants and toddlers, low parental awareness, poverty, high workload of anganwadi workers etc
Suggestions part is good, points are well written, give a subheading before writing the points. Additionally, you can also suggest increase in budgetary allocation; ICDS functionaries to be fully trained in ECCE, including assessment through group activities and child observation; increasing parental awareness etc
Also, write a concluding statement. You can mention SDG 4.
Keep writing. 🙂
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Siddharth
Good attempt.
Your presentation is good, content is also fine.
However, some parts can be made concise which are not asked(general role of Anganwadi that you have written after intro) and suggestions and challenges can be elaborated a bit more, as these are exclusively asked.
Intro is fine, additionally, you can mention a data point that NFHS-5 finds only 13.6% of children enrolled in pre-primary schools.
In challenges, also mention about lack of parental awareness, poverty etc
Other points are good.
In suggestions, you can also add points like removing burden of non-ICDS work from Anganwadi workers, increasing budgetary allocation, increasing parental awareness etc
Conclusion is fine. SDG 4 can be incorporated too.
Keep writing. 🙂
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