Mentor’s comment-
- https://www.thehindu.com/
opinion/op-ed/the-union- budget-lacks-the-power-to- transform-services/ article65078007.ece - In the intro, mention that the availability of reliable electricity supply can improve the delivery of health and education services.
- In the body, mention the reasons for the lack of integrations and the link between the delivery of service and availability of power.
- Conclude by mentioning the need to link the availability of energy with the developmental policy formulations.
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Karun
Nice introduction. Importance has been mixed up with reasons(points 2,3,4).
You can add continuos need of supply for day-to-day services, required to achieve government’s objectives listed out in budget for the social sector.
Reasons and conclusion are fine, issues in distribution and loss on revenues can be touched upon too.
A brief way forward will add value to the answer.
Keep practicing. 🙂