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-https://indianexpress.com/article/opinion/columns/why-the-diary-sector-needs-more-private-players-7387923/
-In the intro mention that India is top milk producer in the world.
-In the body, mention the significance by mentioning significance in terms of cost, dominance of small players, no MSP etc. In the private players’ role mention use of technology, investment, storage etc can be scaled up and help the sector grow.
-Conclude by mentioning the need to facilitate the role of private players.
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Subhashree
Introduction is good. Significance of dairy sector is also fine. You can also mention the 6% growth per annum compared to 1.6% growth in cereals per annum.
Challenges part is okay. Mention important role of private sector in growth after delicensing in 2002-03. Then mention some more points about how private sector can help- farm-to-home experience, can supply testing kits at home, enabling traceability across supply chain, provide solutions to green fodder deficit, artificial insemination etc. This section should be addressed properly as this is exclusively asked.
Points regarding dairypreneurs and conclusion is good.
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Vishal
I think 5.3% is old data. Contribution of dairy sector to agri-GDP is almost 27-28% now. Also you can mention India is the largest producer of milk.
Points written in significance are good, also mention about growth rate of 6% per annum compared to 1.6% for cereals, also important source of income for small farmers as average size of cattle holding is low. Mention can also be made of no MSP, prices based on demand-supply.
Mention important role of private sector in growth after delicensing in 2002-03. Then mention some more points about how private sector can help- farm-to-home experience, can supply testing kits at home, enabling traceability across supply chain, digital solutions by dairypreneurs, provide solutions to green fodder deficit, artificial insemination etc. This section should be addressed properly as this is exclusively asked.
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Rupesh
Introduction is fine. In significance mention about contribution of dairy sector to agri-GDP. Also mention about growth rate of 6% per annum compared to 1.6% for cereals, role in rural economy.
You can briefly mention few challenges also. Role of private sector is fine. You can also mention their role since delicensing in 2002-03.
Conclusion is good.
Regarding writing, I think it is fine. Just try to maintain neatness. Don’t force fit things or write outside the margins, maintain proper space. If your content is good, it will covers some flaws of writing.
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Sumita
Focus on significance part more than challenges. Question has exclusively asked that. mention about contribution of dairy sector to agri-GDP. Also mention about growth rate of 6% per annum compared to 1.6% for cereals, role in rural economy, absence of MSP( supply-demand determining price). Most of the farmers have low cattle holding, lifeline for them.
Challenges part is fine. You can make it more brief.
Role of private sector is also fine, mention about budding dairypreneurs, role in providing solutions to green fodder deficit, artificial insemination etc. Rest of the points are good.
Conclusion is fine.
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Rajlaxmi
Introduction is fine. Significance part is also good. I think that should be 26% of agri-GDP not overall GDP, frame it properly. Also you can mention about no MSP(price determined by demand-supply), insurance in case of failure of agriculture etc
In role of private sector, mention about overall contribution after delicensing in 2002-03. Then you can mention the technology that can be used such as green fodder technology, digitisation across supply chain, artificial insemination etc. No need to mention particular names of private companies, it will be hard to remember as well.
Also you can mention about their role in storage and processing facilities.
Conclusion is fine.
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Mradul
Introduction is good. In significance, it feels like you are writing about the potential of the dairy sector.
Mention the importance it has already achieved. Mention 26% contribution to agri-GDP, growth rate of 6% per annum compared to 1.6% for cereals, role in rural economy – livelihoods, per capita income etc, insurance in case of crop failure etc
Role of private sector is well written. You can add points like their capacity to enable traceability across supply chain, provide solutions to green fodder deficit, artificial insemination , increase processing facilities etc. In this part you can mention about potential of private sector.
Conclusion is fine.
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Ankita
Introduction will be better if you mention things related exclusively dairy sector. You can mention that India is the largest producer of milk on the world.
Significance part is good, mention some data points like 26% contribution to agri-GDP, growth rate of 6% per annum compared to 1.6% for cereals. Also you can make it a bit concise for example parts of the last point can be mentioned in conclusion.
Points mentioned in role of private sectors are fine. Some more can be added- capacity to enable traceability and digitisation across supply chain, farm-to-home delivery, provide solutions to green fodder deficit, artificial insemination , increase processing facilities etc.
Conclusion is good. Instead of writing a lot about one point, try to include multiple points.
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Sushmita
Introduction is good. Points on significance are also fine. Also mention about its role in rural economy- per capita income increase, large number of farmers dependent as cattle holding is low. Also it acts as a constant source of income, insurance for farmers in case of crop failure.
Challenges are fine. Can mention about lack of government commitment.
In role of private sector mention about their role in establishing processing and storage facilities, ensuring quality etc. Rest of the points are fine.
Conclusion is good.
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Kartikey
Introduction is good. In significance, mention some data points stressing the importance-26% contribution to agri-GDP, growth rate of 6% per annum compared to 1.6% for cereals. Also you can mention that MSP is not required, lifeline for large number of farmers since cattle holding is low in India. Rest of the points are good.
Briefly you can mention some challenges too. In role of private sector, points are good. You can add examples like solution to green fodder deficit, use of technology in ensuring quality etc
Conclusion is good.
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Rajesh
Introduction is good.
Points in significance are also good. I think 7% of agri-GVA is not correct, it is around 27%. Also you can mention about source of financial empowerment of women via cooperatives, role in livelihood creation, acts as insurance in case of crop failure etc
Briefly you can mention some challenges too. In role of private sector, points are good. Mention about role of technology also, can digitise supply chains, farm-to-home delivery, ensure quality through supply of testing kits etc
Conclusion is good, try to be more neat.
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