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- https://www.thehindu.com/
opinion/op-ed/liberal- economics-creates-illiberal- societies/article38268676.ece - In the intro, mention rising inequality in India.
- In the body, mention economic policies such as globalisation and privatisation failed to achieve equity and resulted in social distress and the emergence of authoritarian governments. In the suggestions mention the need for democratic socialism.
- Conclude by mentioning that human rights must not be overpowered by property rights. A new form of “Gandhian” democratic socialism, powered by cooperative economic enterprises, is required in the 21st century.
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Alka
Introduction is good, however you can mention the inequality report, or some data about rising number of billionaires and at the same time increasing farmer suicides etc to substantiate the first statement.
Points in the next part are good however try to give a subheading. You can mention one point about gender inequality and impact on socio-economically backward section of society to diversify the answer.
Automation and tech advancement leading to loss of jobs can also be mentioned.
Suggestions can also be listed pointwise for better impact.
Conclusion is good.
Keep practicing. 🙂