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-In the intro, mention rise in inflation owing to factors such as the Ukraine war and supply chain disruption due to Covid-19.
-In the body mention how inflation affects the poor especially food inflation. In the next part mention various factors such as taxation policies that are contributing to increasing inequality.
-Conclude by mentioning the measures such as increasing allocation for MGNREGA to soften the blow of inflation and changes in tax policies.
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Uttara
You have written well but presentation can be better.
Pick your subheadings from the question itself, otherwise there is a chance to digress. The question is not asking overall impacts of inflation. Your subheadings should be more on lines of ‘affect of inflation on the poor’ and ‘impact on increasing inequality’.
In first part, points are fine.
In next part, points are repetitive (1st and 3rd). You can mention things like slow farm and non-farm wage growth, high out of pocket expenditure on healthcare, increase in indirect taxes such as excise whereas at the same time low corporate tax, waiving of surcharge for FPIs. Some data point can be used to substantiate rising inequality.
Also you can mention a proper way forward- increasing allocation for MGNREGA, urban employment guarantee schemes, price stability via government channels, reducing taxes etc
Then conclude. Try to use hub-spoke diagrams to tackle some parts of the answer in brief.
Also go through the article attached above if you have not yet, it will help in content-building.
Keep practicing. 🙂
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Pranav
Introduction is fine(briefly you can mention some causes to- supply chain issues due to pandemic, Russia-Ukraine crisis etc).Presentation of your answer is also good. Nice use of diagram.
However, in the body, try to diversify your content.. Otherwise it looks like a GS1 society answer.. Points in first part are fine, In next part, you can mention things like slow farm and non-farm wage growth, increase in indirect taxes such as excise whereas at the same time low corporate tax, waiving of surcharge for FPIs. Some data point can be used from the State of Inequality in India report to substantiate rising inequality.
Way forward is fine, try to end with a one line conclusion. The answer looks complete that way.
Keep practicing. 🙂
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Aditi
You have written a lot of things but every thing is mixed up.
Try to follow the question and address what all is asked only.
Here after intro, you can divide the question into two subheadings on the lines of ‘affect of inflation on the poor’ and ‘impact on increasing inequality’. Then write a way forward and conclude. There is no need of writing all the theory related to inflation, to keep your point you can’t start from basics, just mention your point and move on. Answer will be rich in content and crisp that way.
Intro is fine, use of graphs is good, briefly you can mention some causes like supply chain issues due to pandemic, Russia-Ukraine crisis etc.
In impact on poor mention increasing food and fuel prices, impact on nutritional outcomes etc
In next part on increasing mention things like slow farm and non-farm wage growth, high out of pocket expenditure on healthcare, increase in indirect taxes such as excise whereas at the same time low corporate tax, waiving of surcharge for FPIs. Some data point can be used to substantiate rising inequality but use it at one place only, don’t spread it over the answer. Most of what you have written in 2nd page can be avoided.
Next, mention a way forward where you can talk about increasing taxes on the rich and reducing excise duty, increasing allocation for MGNREGA, urban employment guarantee schemes, price stability via government channels etc
Read some other answers as well as the article attached above.
Keep practicing.
Also, mention your reference ID from next time onwards while posting answers. 🙂